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    Please help me improve the following sentences!

    Please help me improve the following sentences!

    I am sorry to inform that as I was very busy during the whole of October 2012, I submitted the application for overtime allowance on 02.10.2012 as late as 02.11.2012. I hope you can accept my request for back-paying the above-stated overtime allowance. Thank you for your assistance!

    Thank you!

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    Re: Please help me improve the following sentences!

    Quote Originally Posted by chowbarry View Post
    Please help me improve the following sentences!
    (There is no need for an exclamation (!) point here, a period will suffice)

    I am sorry to inform that as I was very busy during the whole of October 2012, I submitted the application for overtime allowance on 02.10.2012 as late as 02.11.2012. I hope you can accept my request for back-paying the above-stated overtime allowance. Thank you for your assistance!

    Thank you!
    I am sorry (Why are you sorry. It doesn't seem that you are guilty of anything) to inform that as I was very busy during the whole of October, 2012. I submitted the application for overtime allowance on 02.10.2012 as late as 02.11.2012 (I do not understand this part. Did you submit the application on 2/10/12 and every day thereafter until 2/11/12? Could you mean that you submitted the application for 2/10/12 on 2/11/12?). I hope you can accept my request for back-paying the above-stated overtime allowance. Thank you for your assistance!.

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    Re: Please help me improve the following sentences!

    Gillnetter, thank you!

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