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    Default Please correct my email !

    last year I apply to school in U.S.A. to study english .they send me the admission, but due to personal circumstances, I could not attend the course.nowI am ready to attend the course.so I want to write email asking them if is it possiple to attend the course with the previous appliction or should i reapply again. please correct my email becauseI know there are many grammar mistake.
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    With reference to my previous application abc 629854, I am writing to enroll in your Intensive English program which will start on April 3rd 2013. Please let me know if I should re-apply again or just send you updated financial documents .

    Thank you for your cooperation .
    Best,
    Al


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    Default Re: Please correct my email !

    Quote Originally Posted by rsr58 View Post
    Last year I applied to a school in the U.S.A. to study English. They sent me the admission (I think perhaps you mean "They granted me admission), but due to personal circumstances, I could not attend the course. Now I am ready to attend the course (no full stop) so I want to write an email asking them if is it possiple to attend the course with the previous application or should if I should reapply. again. Please correct my email because I know there are many grammar mistakes.
    Here is my email:


    With reference to my previous application (Ref: abc 629854), I am writing to enroll enrol in your Intensive English program which will start on April 3rd 2013. Please let me know if I should reapply again or just send you updated financial documents.
    Thank you for your cooperation.
    Best,
    Al


    [Your full name]
    The actual email is pretty good and I have only had to make a couple of corrections. The rest of your post was not of the same quality unfortunately. Please look at the amendments I have made above in red. Whenever you write in English, you must:

    - Start every sentence with a capital letter.
    - End every sentence with a single punctuation mark.
    - Capitalise the word "I" (first person singular).
    - Do not put a space before a full stop, comma, question mark or exclamation mark.
    - Always put a space after a full stop, comma, question mark or exclamation mark.

    Note that you don't need to say both "reapply" and "again". "Reapply" (no hyphen required) means "to apply again".
    Remember - correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing make posts much easier to read.

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    Default Re: Please correct my email !

    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    The actual email is pretty good and I have only had to make a couple of corrections. The rest of your post was not of the same quality unfortunately. Please look at the amendments I have made above in red. Whenever you write in English, you must:

    - Start every sentence with a capital letter.
    - End every sentence with a single punctuation mark.
    - Capitalise the word "I" (first person singular).
    - Do not put a space before a full stop, comma, question mark or exclamation mark.
    - Always put a space after a full stop, comma, question mark or exclamation mark.

    Note that you don't need to say both "reapply" and "again". "Reapply" (no hyphen required) means "to apply again".

    Thank you so much for your correction and advice. next time I will follow your guidence.

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    Default Re: Please correct my email !

    Quote Originally Posted by rsr58 View Post
    Thank you so much for your correction and advice. Next time I will follow your guidance.
    You're welcome. Remember to follow the rules of written English every time you post!
    Remember - correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing make posts much easier to read.

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    Default enroll v enrol

    Re: Please correct my email !
    Originally Posted by rsr58
    Last year I applied to a school in the U.S.A. to study English. They sent me the admission (I think perhaps you mean "They granted me admission), but due to personal circumstances, I could not attend the course. Now I am ready to attend the course (no full stop) so I want to write an email asking them if is it possiple to attend the course with the previous application or should if I should reapply. again Please correct my email because I know there are many grammar mistakes.
    Here is my email:


    With reference to my previous application (Ref: abc 629854), I am writing to enroll enrol in your Intensive English program which will start on April 3rd 2013. Please let me know if I should reapply again or just send you updated financial documents.
    Thank you for your cooperation.
    Best
    Al


    [Your full name]

    More: http://www.usingenglish.com/forum/le...-my-email.html

    Thank you, emsr, very much for your precious help as always. When I write in English, I don’t pay a close attention to American and British English spelling differences as the saying goes "All roads lead to Rome." In other words, the most important thing is to write correctly, avoiding misspelling.

    Question: Why did you mark enroll as wrong while it is being written here with double L? Also, here the letter L is being doubled.


    P.S.: Please accept my note with open arms. I don’t intend to consume your time, but I want to learn something new since I am from a disadvantage area and there is no , of course, English language maven.
    Last edited by emsr2d2; 26-Jan-2013 at 17:28. Reason: Space

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    Default Re: enroll v enrol

    Apologies. "Enrol" is BrE. "Enroll" is AmE but I had forgotten that when I corrected the word. As long as you stick to one variant throughout a piece, it doesn't matter whether you choose BrE or AmE.
    Remember - correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing make posts much easier to read.

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