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    Question Does this sentence sound nature?

    We rented a huge venue in our local building, so all the mandatory sports are going to be confined to it.

    Any alteration to this sentence cause it seems to be a bit unnatural.


    Thanks in advance.
    Last edited by saloom2; 28-Jan-2013 at 21:54. Reason: Mistype.

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    Default Re: Does this sentence sound nature?

    Quote Originally Posted by saloom2 View Post
    We rented a huge venue in our local building, so all the mandatory sports is going to be confined to it.

    Any alteration to this sentence cause it seems to be a bit unnatural.


    Thanks in advance.

    For a start, why have you followed "sports" with "is"? And what does "mandatory sports" mean?
    Remember - correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing make posts much easier to read.

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    Default Re: Does this sentence sound nature?

    Well, I have a writing to do which is about 'The school is going to make a compulsory PE every day, you were chosen to write a letter to the parents to inform them about it'. one of the details that I should mention is where the activities/sports are going to be held. that's it.I did write this phrase , but actually I think it's a bit awkward, so what do you think? do you have any other suggestions??

    Thanks in advance.

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    Default Re: Does this sentence sound nature?

    So this is homework?
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    Default Re: Does this sentence sound nature?

    Nope, I have to do at least 3 writings a day to enhance my skills.In addition to this, I have other homework, like Grammar and vocabulary. What is your opinion about the sentence??
    Last edited by saloom2; 29-Jan-2013 at 07:52.

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    Default Re: Does this sentence sound nature?

    It sounds like homework to me.

    You should let your teacher see it first. Ask us again if you don't understand any of his/her corrections.

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    Default Re: Does this sentence sound nature?

    You said "Well, I have a writing to do which is about 'The school is going to make a compulsory PE every day, you were chosen to write a letter to the parents to inform them about it'."

    That sounds as if you have been given this task by a teacher or a tutor. You said "I have to do at least 3 writings a day ..." Who told you to do that? And who will check that you have done them?
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    Default Re: Does this sentence sound nature?

    The writings is in my pastpapers and who check them friends of mine, who got higher mark than mine. my tutor doesn't mark them correctly, so I have stopped giving them my work, and I only do the Grammar and Vocab. work with them, but why all this? I want to know whether it's right or not!! that's it.

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    Default Re: Does this sentence sound nature?

    We have rented a large space in our building to hold our PE classes.
    Last edited by emsr2d2; 29-Jan-2013 at 13:42.
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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    Default Re: Does this sentence sound nature?

    Saloom said he is doing the exercise on his own initiative and is getting his friend to check it for him. He has not expressed it very well but I think we should give him the benefit of the doubt.

    We rented a huge venue in our local building, so all the mandatory sports are going to be confined to it.

    venue in our local building - this is vague. What do you mean exactly? what local building?
    mandatory sports - vague again, the compulsory PE sessions?
    confined to it - wrong use of the word 'confine'. You can say : We rented a (place) to accomodate/hold the activities/sports

    I suggest you keep your sentence simple by avoiding words like venue, mandatory, confine.

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