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haidy97

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(some people say that in the future there will be no schools and students will learn online at home) .Write your views about this issue.



The tremendous advance in technology has changed our lives in many aspects. One of these aspects is online learning. Do you think that online learning can totally replace schools?

To begin with, online learning provides education for all people. The movement of education to the internet has opened up a new realm of opportunities for students of different ages and backgrounds, so it means that if you have an internet connection, you can access various lessons and lectures.
Furthermore, online-learning is worldwide. This reveals the advantage of attaining knowledge of the way other people live and their customs of different culture and religions; in addition of sharing information about different lifestyles and traditions.
Far and away the biggest disadvantage of learning online is that most people lack the feasibility to manage their own time. Without setting a specific time for studying, many people would skip doing their studies.
All things considered, I believe that although online learning present diverse advantages but we can not deny the importance of the schools.


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The tremendous advancement in technology has changed our lives in many aspects. One of these aspects is online learning. Do you think that online learning can totally replace schools?
To begin with, online learning provides education [STRIKE]for[/STRIKE] to all people. The movement (shift?) of education from schools to the internet has opened up a new realm of opportunities [STRIKE]for[/STRIKE] to students of different ages and backgrounds, so it means that if you have an internet connection, you can access to various lessons and lectures available online .
Furthermore, online-learning is worldwide. This reveals the advantage of [STRIKE]attaining[/STRIKE] acquiring knowledge of the way other people live and their different customs, [STRIKE]of differen[/STRIKE]t culture and religions; in addition of sharing information about different lifestyles and traditions.
[STRIKE]Far and away[/STRIKE] On the other hand, the biggest disadvantage of learning online is that most people lack the[STRIKE] feasibility [/STRIKE] discipline to manage their own time. Without setting a specific time for studying, many people [STRIKE]would skip doing [/STRIKE] tend to neglect their studies.
[STRIKE]All things considered[/STRIKE] In conclusion/To sum up, I believe that although online learning [STRIKE]present[/STRIKE] has diverse advantages, [STRIKE]but[/STRIKE] we can not deny the importance of [STRIKE]the[/STRIKE] schools.
 

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When do you have to submit your essay to your teacher?
 
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