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thomas615

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Can you check for errors. I want to improve my writing. Thank you.

I talked to my aunt yesterday and she told me she is now having financial problems as she is owing her landlord two months rent. She asked if I could check and see if she could get help from some social welfare agency. She said her doctor has referred her to see another doctor because of her neck problems.
 

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From grammatical point of view it doesn't look bad at all. I would try to avoid the excessive repetition of pronouns ("She", "doctor"), however, and would split the sentences a little bit more so the structure would look more natural.

Here's what I mean:

I talked to my aunt yesterday. She reported having financial problems due to owing her landlord two months rent. She asked if I could check and see if there's any chance to get help from some social welfare agency. She also said that her doctor has referred her to see another one because of her neck problems.

See how it looks more natural without repeating the pronouns too much?
 
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