I have been writing this short story to enter into a sci-fi short story competition and I am not very good with my writing skills. I am a computer engineer and I am not illiterate, but I have not written anything like this in years. I am looking for help in editing my short story, as I have seen other people post similar threads, and I will include you in the submission as long as your name is provided.
The story is posted in the link below because it was too long to post on justpaste.it at 1yvj.

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