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    haidy97 is offline Newbie
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    Talking Please check and rate my essay

    (people say there is a first time for everything.recently you did something for the first time in your life.)

    *say what gave you the idea to do it
    *describe what you did for the first tine .
    *explain why you would or would not like to repeat the experience

    Dear molly,
    How are you? I hope you are doing well. Sorry I am taking so long to write, but I have been busy this weekend. Anyway, I thought I would drop you a line to let you know all about it.
    Last week, I decided to go to the Horse Riding contest which took place in Peru, I knew about this contest from a leaflet which was hanged on a bus. During the trek, a route that winds through the valleys and over the mountainís passes was followed. People from all around the world came to join in this contest. The track lies between two mountains and is, specially, designed for horse races. Each member rode on his horse getting ready in addition to a small group of helpers for emergency, the contests were just six. After the sign, we began the race; I was occupying the third rank when we finished the race.
    I was really blessed with experience and I am longing to recur it over again as it was dreadfully impressive.
    Well, thatís all my news for now. Please write back and let me know what you have been up to.
    Lots of love,
    Relina
    thanks in advance

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    billmcd is offline Key Member
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    Default Re: Please check and rate my essay

    Quote Originally Posted by haidy97 View Post
    (people say there is a first time for everything.recently you did something for the first time in your life.)

    *say what gave you the idea to do it
    *describe what you did for the first tine .
    *explain why you would or would not like to repeat the experience

    Dear Molly,
    How are you? I hope you are doing well. Sorry I am taking so long to write, but I have been busy this weekend. Anyway, I thought I would drop you a line to let you know all about it.
    Last week, I decided to go to the Horse Riding contest which took place in Peru, I knew about this contest from a leaflet which was hanged posted on a the bus. During the trek, A route that winds through the valleys and over the mountain’s passes was followed. People from all around the world came to join in this contest. The track lies between two mountains and is specially designed for horse races. Each member rode on his horse getting ready in addition to a small group of helpers for any emergency. There were just six contests. the contests were just six. After the sign signal, we began the race; I was occupying the third rank when we finished the race.
    I was really blessed with the experience and I am longing to recur it over participate again as it was dreadfully (this is a negative term that I don't think you intend) tremendously impressive.
    Well, that’s all my news for now. Please write back and let me know what you have been up to.
    Lots of love,
    Relina
    thanks in advance
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