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    Question Motivation Letter for Study in China (on Scholarship)

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    Personal Introduction
    I am Kamal Uddin from Pakistan; I hold a four year bachelor's degree majoring on Electrical Engineering from Mehran University of Engineering & Technology (MUET), Jamshoro, Sindh, Pakistan, with GPA 3.4 out of 4.00. I was an active student during my undergraduate studies, involved in many curricular & non-curricular events. In fact, I am amongst the top 20 students of my class of 120 students. I have been, in the past, amongst the top rankers in the entrance tests conducted by the academic institution of my education.
    Currently, I am working in Dawlance Group of Companies (Leading household appliances company in Pakistan) as a Maintenance Engineer; my job responsibilities include maintenance and troubleshooting of machines along with the planning & the proper allocation of available resources to achieve the smooth operation of the plant with the maximum efficiency. I have also done internship in National Transmission & Despatch Company (NTDC), Pakistan, where I gained extensive knowledge about Grid System Operation (GSO), Protection and Instrumentation (P & I), and Metering and Testing (M & T).
    I would like to apply for the Master's Degree in the subject Masters in Detection Technology and Instrumentation or Control Engineering from China because from my current industrial job experience and past internship I come to know the practical applications of my chosen field, this thing created a thirst of knowledge in me for my chosen course. My aim is to work in an international field related to Electrical Engineering. Therefore, I would like to gain deeper theoretical and practical knowledge to start and manage innovative projects, and I would hope to be able to take part in maximizing my Country’s Technology to increase its economy and enhance the living standards of my countrymen.
    I expect that this Master Program provides me chance to get to know with Electrical systems and affiliates me dedicatedly to the industries, which are living examples of the art of Electrical Engineering. I hope that I can gain more experience in dealing with situations, people, systems, demands that will be of a great help to me for my future career.
    Reason to Study in CHINA
    Now the question arises, why China?? I think I don’t need to explain reasons in detail as nowadays the whole of the world is much known with China’s rapid economic growth & its diverse technological advancements, which are the main causes of fascination for everyone to study in China. On top of that, education standards and ranking of Chinese universities in the world is great reason for choosing China to be my next educational furnishing institute. I have few friends studying in China I have always heard them admiring about china and Chinese universities, which gives me a sign of satisfaction if I will be studying in any Chinese university. Moreover, China’s diverse cultural values and Pak-China friendly relations make me feel China as my second Homeland; my family is much satisfied with China as my preference for my further study. These reasons altogether make China as an ideal place for me to do my master degree in China.
    I hope this application will receive your favorable consideration and I will be happy to meet you at your convenience and provide additional information you may need. I look forward to receive your reply.

    Prospective Student,
    Kamal Uddin

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    Quote Originally Posted by Kamal Hassan Arbab View Post
    STUDY PLAN

    Personal Introduction

    I am My name is Kamal Uddin and I am from Pakistan. I hold a [four-year] Bachelor's Degree majoring on in Electrical Engineering from Mehran University of Engineering & Technology (MUET), Jamshoro, Sindh, Pakistan, with a GPA of 3.4 out of 4.00. In fact, I am was amongst the top 20 twenty students of my class of 120 students. I have been, in the past, amongst the top rankers in the entrance tests conducted by the academic institution of my education.

    I was an active student during my undergraduate studies, involved in many curricular & and nonextra-curricular events activities. (Note that I have moved this sentence from the middle of the previous paragraph.)

    Currently, I am working in the Dawlance Group of Companies (the leading household appliances company in Pakistan) as a Maintenance Engineer; my job responsibilities include maintenance and troubleshooting of machines along with the planning & and the proper allocation of available resources to achieve the smooth and efficient operation of the plant. with the maximum efficiency. I have also done completed an internship in at National Transmission & Despatch Company (NTDC), Pakistan, where I gained extensive knowledge about Grid System Operation (GSO), Protection and Instrumentation (P&I), and Metering and Testing (M&T).

    I would like to apply to study for the Master's Degree in the subject Masters in Detection Technology and Instrumentation or Control Engineering from in China. because from My current industrial job experience and past internship I come to know the practical applications of my chosen field, this thing have created given me a thirst of for knowledge. in me for my chosen course. My aim is to work in an international field related to Electrical Engineering. Therefore, I would like to gain deeper theoretical and practical knowledge to in starting and managing innovative projects, and I would hope to be able to take part in maximizing my country’s technology to increase benefit its economy and enhance the living standards of my countrymen compatriots.

    I expect believe that this Masters Program will provides me with the chance to get to know with electrical systems and affiliates me dedicatedly to the industries, which are living examples of the art of Electrical Engineering (the underlined sentence doesn't make sense and you need to rewrite it) I hope that I can gain more experience in dealing with situations, people, systems and demands that which will be of a great help to me for in my future career.

    Reasons to study in China

    Now the question arises, "Why China?" I think I don’t need to explain reasons in detail as nowadays the whole of the world is much known with China’s rapid economic growth & and its diverse technological advancements, which are internationally recognised and are the main causes of fascination for everyone reasons for people to study in China. On top of that, education standards and the global ranking of Chinese universities in the world is are great reasons for choosing China as the base for my continuing education. to be my next educational furnishing institute. I have a few friends studying in China and I have always heard them they are full of admiration about for China and Chinese its universities, which is very encouraging gives me a sign of satisfaction if I will be studying in any Chinese university. Moreover, China’s diverse cultural values and Pak-China the friendly relationship between Pakistan and China make me feel as if China as is my second homeland. My family is much satisfied with fully supports my choice of China as my preference for my further study education. All these reasons altogether put together make China as an ideal place for me to do my Masters degree. in China.

    I hope this application will receive your favorable consideration and I will be happy to meet you at your convenience and provide any additional information you may need. I look forward to receiving your reply.

    Prospective Student,
    Kamal Uddin
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