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    Hello everyone,

    Prisons, in addition to increasing access to drugs, soar crime rate, since the concentration of aggressive people on one place may form more friendships. ... etc.

    Am I using these punctuation in red correctly?
    I wish I had better English, but I work hard to improve it. I'm studying for IGCSE, so I'm only interested in BrE.

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    Default Re: Punctuation of this sentence.

    No. Not only that, but the whole construction of the sentence as far as you have gone is also wrong. I'm not sure what you are trying to say, but I'll make a guess, and suggest it be written as follows:

    As well as allowing increasing access to drugs, prisons actually contribute to a soaring crime rate, through the friendships formed by aggressive people concentrated in one place.
    I'm not a teacher of English, but I have spoken it for (almost) all of my life....

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    Default Re: Punctuation of this sentence.

    Why did you put a comma before through??
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    Default Re: Punctuation of this sentence.

    Why did you put a comma before 'through'? ?
    A single question mark is correct.

    In my opinion the comma is optional. Omit it if you wish.

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    Default Re: Punctuation of this sentence.

    Well, is there a reason for making it optional?
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    Default Re: Punctuation of this sentence.

    Quote Originally Posted by saloom2 View Post
    Well, is there a reason for making it optional?
    The fact that it's optional seems like a pretty good reason.
    Remember - correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing make posts much easier to read.

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