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    Default Please correct my article

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    In the history of mankind, the Internet is one of the most ingenious invention and it has revolutionized among others the way we do our shopping. Because of the plentiful advantages and benefits of shopping online, more and more people these days prefer it over conventional shopping and according to a survey conducted last month, many people suggested that the days of the high street store are numbered.


    In the first place, buying things online is much easier since it consists in only making a simple search with the the desired product.For instance, if you want to buy a book, you don't have to search desperately through numerous shelves anymore in order to find it.A further advantage of online shopping is that you save valuable time which can be put to better use inasmuch as travelling isn't needed.Besides, the prices are reasonable because they come to you direct from the manufacturer or seller without middlemen involved.Another obvious benefit of online shopping which cannot be overlooked is convenience by giving you the opportunity to shop for products or services no matter where you are so that it is a relaxing activity especially if you love to browse.Last but not least, with online shopping you will benefit greatly by avoiding crowds and parking fees which can only lead to consumer frustration.However, opponents of online shopping claim that the high street store gives you the chance to meet up with friends and perhaps make better decisions regarding buying a product based on their tips.


    In conclusion, having access to online shopping has opened new doors and opportunities that enable for a more convenient lifestyle today. However, people must be aware of the high street shopping advantages too and don't let it vanish since it offers the truly charm of purchasing and it's also a form of bringing people together in order to enjoy firmly this activity.


    From my point of view, the high street shopping will be largely obsolete in the near future due to the increasing popularity of online shopping.People will become more and more reliant on technology since it is a huge convenience for them to do so. Likewise, it will become convenient to shop at the comfort of our home and an exponentially number of websites are offering such service. Therefore with the ease and avail, more and more people will shop online and gradually the high street shops will disappear.


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    Default Re: Please correct my article

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    In the history of mankind, the Internet is one of the most ingenious inventions, and it has revolutionized, among other things, the way we do our shopping. Because of the plentiful advantages and benefits of shopping online, more and more people these days prefer it over conventional shopping, and according to a survey conducted last month, many people suggest that the days of the high street store are numbered.

    In the first place, buying things online is much easier, since it consists in only making a simple search for the the desired product. For instance, if you want to buy a book, you don't have to search desperately through numerous shelves anymore in order to find it. A further advantage of online shopping is that you save valuable time, inasmuch as travelling isn't needed, which can be put to better use. Besides, the prices are reasonable, because the goods come to you direct from the manufacturer or seller without middlemen involved. Another obvious benefit of online shopping which cannot be overlooked is convenience. By giving you the opportunity to shop for products or services no matter where you are, it becomes a relaxing activity, especially if you love to browse. Last but not least, with online shopping you will benefit greatly by avoiding the crowds and parking fees which lead to consumer frustration. However, opponents of online shopping claim that the high street store gives you the chance to meet up with friends, and perhaps make better decisions regarding buying a product based on their tips.

    In conclusion, having access to online shopping has opened new doors and opportunities that make for a more convenient lifestyle today. However, people must be aware of the high street shopping advantages too, and don't let it vanish, since it offers the true charm of purchasing and brings people together to enjoy this activity.

    From my point of view, high street shopping will be largely obsolete in the near future, due to the increasing popularity of online shopping. People will become more and more reliant on technology, since it is a huge convenience for them to do so. Likewise, it will become convenient to shop in the comfort of our home and an large number of websites are offering such services. Therefore with the ease and availability, more and more people will shop online, and gradually the high street shops will disappear.


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