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    can someone please help me

    i left my family and arizona and the rest of my non existent life to go to a pubic school in michigan. my mother insisted on singing to Beyonce the whole car ride to my new apartment when we finally arrived i gave her a big hug and kiss on the cheek and we said are goodbyes as i walked into my room i notice a very beautiful girl i got so mesmerized i just stood at the door like a dummy as she called my name finally i snapped out of it and said sup i i think to myself you are such a loser i can tell she is one of the popular kids at school but anyway maybe i should snap out of it again


    hi... i said awkwardly


    hey jesse
    i have been waiting for you nice to finally meet you my name is Selena i had no idea i was going to have a boy for a roommate the girls are gonna get a kick out of this well as your room is the one on the left go ahead and set your things in there


    ok thank you i will be back i am just gonna set my thing up


    wow this room is huge room i never expected the apartment to be so nice i guess i will have to call my mom later and thank her for such a great place.

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    Default Re: short edit

    There is nothing we can do with your piece until you sort out the lack of capitalisation and punctuation. Please edit your post, following these rules of written English:

    - Start every new sentence with a capital letter.
    - Always capitalise the word "I" (first person singular).
    - End every sentence with a single appropriate punctuation mark.
    - Speech should be enclosed in quotation marks, for example ... "Hi", I said awkwardly.

    Don't use "textspeak/chatlish" such as "gonna" - it's "going to".
    Remember - correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing make posts much easier to read.

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