Nice work! You have highlighted good information and you use a variety of ways to make comparisons. This is a very solid essay.
I've highlighted a few errors in red and I've marked a couple places in blue that I will comment on at the bottom of this post.
- The vocabulary is good, but the position is not quite right. You could put "whereas" after "energy" in that sentence and it would be correct.
- Here's an example of the anglo double negaive phobia. We aren't not afraid of double negatives! You can just leave out "neither" and change "nor" to "or" and the sentence would be fine. You could also leave out "not" and the sentence would be OK but it would feel a bit more formal than the rest of your response (which is written at the correct level).
When is your exam and what score do you need? If you want more tips about the exam you can check my website: Part 3: Writing | Ben Teaches English Good luck in your preparation!
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