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    Default I made a story

    I made a story.

    I woke up 7am. Then i went to the restroom .Then I had brush and took shower.
    About 8am i had my breakfast.I read the newspaper while taking breakfast.
    After that I went to school. My school time was 9am. I was little late in to school. Lunch break was around 1pm.Around 4pm my school was over.Then I came home. Then I had to cook my dinner.But I am so tired today.Thats why I ordered cheese pizza. After that I turned on the tv. And watched movie as eating pizza. Then I slept around 10pm.

    Please tell me my mistakes. I am very thankful to you.

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    Default Re: I made a story

    Quote Originally Posted by Prito View Post
    I made a story.

    I woke up at 7am. Then I went to the restroom bathroom ("restroom" would be considered a public facility) .Then I had brush (? Do you mean "brushed my teeth/hair?) and took a shower.
    About 8am I had my breakfast and I read the newspaper while taking breakfast.
    After that I went to school. My school time was 9am. I was a little late in to school. Lunch break was around 1pm. Around 4pm my school was over.Then I came home. Then I had to cook my dinner. But I am so tired today.That's why I ordered a cheese pizza. After that I turned on the TV. And watched a movie as while eating pizza. Then I slept retired (or "went to bed") around 10pm.

    Please tell me my mistakes. I am very thankful to you.
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    Default Re: I made a story

    Thanks once again.
    Your advice is very helpful.

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