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    Smile Does this sentence sound natural? ' our school has employed Mr. Hassan as a Headteac'

    Hello everyone,

    Does this sentence sound natural? If so, would you amend the parts which might be weak or could have been better typed.

    Our school has employed Mr. Hassan as a Headteacher - I though he was as uptight as the previous one, Mr. Gamal, when I first saw him shout at one of the kindergarten students, but he turned out to be a kind, approachable and wise man that use his wisdom to solve problems among students, and much to my surprise, he's stopped Jack from bullying.
    I wish I had better English, but I work hard to improve it. I'm studying for IGCSE, so I'm only interested in BrE.

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    Re: Does this sentence sound natural? ' our school has employed Mr. Hassan as a Headt

    Quote Originally Posted by saloom2 View Post
    Hello everyone,

    Does this sentence sound natural? If so, would you amend the parts which might be weak or could have been better typed. (Not "typed". Typing is a matter of striking keys. A better word is "written".)

    Our school has employed Mr. Hassan as a (I assume that there is only one "Headteacher", so "a" cannot be used here. Either do not use an article, or use "the".) Headteacher - I though he was as uptight as the previous one, Mr. Gamal, when I first saw him shout (One does not "see" a shout, one hears a "shout".) at one of the kindergarten students, but he turned out to be a kind, approachable and wise man that (Use "who" when referring to people.) uses his wisdom to solve problems among students, and, much to my surprise, he's stopped Jack from bullying.
    Gil

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    Re: Does this sentence sound natural? ' our school has employed Mr. Hassan as a Headt

    Quote Originally Posted by Mr. Gamal, when I first saw him shout [/I
    [/COLOR](One does not "see" a shout, one hears a "shout".)
    I was at his office when he suddenly stand up to shout at the kid. So I saw what happened then. It should be see, shouldn't it? I just want more clarify on that point.
    I wish I had better English, but I work hard to improve it. I'm studying for IGCSE, so I'm only interested in BrE.

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    Re: Does this sentence sound natural? ' our school has employed Mr. Hassan as a Headt

    Quote Originally Posted by saloom2 View Post
    I was at in his office when he suddenly stand stood up to shout at the kid child ("kid" is used in an informal sense. Actually, a kid is the offspring of a goat). So, I saw what happened then. It should be see, shouldn't it? I just want more clarify on that point.
    It could be used that way. I was pointing out that sounds are heard, not seen.

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