writting problems

[myalterego2012]

Hi everyone,
Is it correct to use the following structure in a formal essay when giving several reasons proceeding each other?

"Due to temperature rise in the current century, and due to development of the regions with rising temperature and also temperature importance as a basic element in climate system, it is important to know in what pace the temperature is rising and what areas it affects in each period."


Thanks for your help in advance

 

[emsr2d2]

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[myalterego2012]

I am Sorry. Thanks for your advice.