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    Default Can someone critique this for me?

    Ok, I am writing a poem for my honors english class. my teacher told me i need to play with the words/change the words on line 2 and 4. and i need to add dashes (-)/ split up the lines.. can someone help me?? Well, here is my poem.


    i dont have a title so...
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    keep your head up
    even when you're down
    even when you feel like,
    your world is upside down

    I know you are hurting
    because I feel your pain
    but this is what makes us,
    All the same

    Don't take your life,
    or self harm
    because someone out there,
    is in Love with Your charm

    No one's out to get you
    no one's in your way
    but remember
    we are all
    sort of the Same


    please help!

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    Default Re: Can someone critique this for me?

    Welcome to the forum, kmodi. We like to help when we can, but we don't help with homework assignments. Your teacher wants to know what you can do, not what we can do.
    Please do not edit your question after it has received a response. Such editing can make the response hard for others to understand.


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    Default Re: Can someone critique this for me?

    Additionally, kmodi, work of this nature should be posted in the Editing & Writing Topics forum, to which I am moving it now.

    Rover

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