[Essay] creative thoughts

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Ashiuhto

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Please help me correct the following paragraph. Thanks!

My hobby is painting, which brightens my life. Painting is the language of creative mind. It benefits me by broadening my thoughts. I gain self-esteem and a confidence I never knew I possessed. Through painting I discover in myself a greater appreciation of the beauty of nature.
 
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Gillnetter

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Please help me correct the following paragraph. Thanks!

My hobby is painting, which brightens my life. Painting is the language of the creative mind. It benefits me by broadening my thoughts. I gain self-esteem and a confidence I never knew I possessed. Through painting, I discover in myself a greater appreciation of the beauty of nature.
As written, "creative mind" requires an article. Generally, "the" would be the article of choice, though "a" is acceptable.
 
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