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    amstivan is offline Newbie
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    PLEASE help me correct grammar in my motivation letter

    Dear Sir or Madam,

    I am hereby applying for entrance for the Bachelor's in Economic and Business at the Universiteit van Amsterdam in September 2013.

    The subject of Economics fascinates me. It is interconnected with most social sciences and is the reason behind most our decisions. I wish to educate myself on its complexity and learn the useful tools on how to benefit from my knowledge on this subject. BSc in Economics and Business is the perfect program for me. After having completed BSC, I would like to extend my studies focusing on finance and UvA offers master program just for that.

    During my secondary education I participated in many exchange programs to England and Scotland. I realized that living in another country made me more mature, acquire new skills and clarify my life goals. As I visited United Kingdom before, I chose USA as the country to spend a year in as an exchange student. Studying in USA offered many new experiences. I was the most interested in choosing subjects I preferred and picking classes with higher difficulty. One among many highlights in the US was the participation at the DECA state championships; a competition for all business and marketing students in the whole state. I was fascinated about how businesses operated, how marketing worked and how everybody could be unconsciously influenced. I also participated few school debates over subjects like same sex marriage and gun control. Researching and debating these and similar issues influenced me in choosing Netherlands as the country in which I would like to live and study.

    A very obvious reason why the UvA is an attractive university is its internationality. Amsterdam is very international making UvA the perfect place to start an international business career. The university has a high percentage of international students. I would love to be among international students, because it is a great possibility to broaden my horizons and get in touch with people on international scale. This I see as a clear advantage in pursuing career in business and economics. Another good reason for me to join the UvA is its high standard of education. UvA is highly ranked and this attracts top professors. In addition, the wide range of top partner universities and student networks offer more possibilities to better education.

    All this distinguishes UvA from other universities and is making my choice clear on at what university I want to study. Thank you for considering my application. I would be very pleased to be granted admission for the fall term.

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    billmcd is offline Key Member
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    Re: PLEASE help me correct grammar in my motivation letter

    Quote Originally Posted by amstivan View Post
    Dear Sir or Madam,

    I am hereby applying for entrance for the Bachelor's in Economic and Business at the Universiteit van Amsterdam in September 2013.

    The subject of Economics fascinates me. It is interconnected with most many social sciences and is the reason behind foundation upon which most financial our decisions are based. I wish to educate myself become educated on its complexity and learn the useful tools on how to benefit from my knowledge on this subject. A BSc in Economics and Business is the perfect program for me. After having completed earned a BSC, I would like to extend expand my studies by focusing on finance. and I understand that UvA offers a master program just for that purpose.

    During my secondary education I participated in many exchange programs to in England and Scotland. I have realized that living in another country has made me more mature, has allowed me to acquire new skills and clarify has clarified my life goals. As I Having previously visited United Kingdom before , I chose the USA as the country to in which to spend a year in as an exchange student. Studying in the USA offered me many new experiences. I was the most interested in choosing subjects of my choosing I preferred and picking selecting classes with of higher difficulty. One, among many of the highlights in the US, was the participation at the DECA state championships; a competition for all business and marketing students in the whole state. I was fascinated about with how businesses operated, how marketing worked and how everybody could be unconsciously influenced (Either explain this or delete it). I also participated in a few school debates over subjects like same sex marriage and gun control. Researching and debating these and similar issues influenced me in choosing Netherlands as the country in which I would like to live and study. (Why?)

    A very obvious reason why the UvA is an attractive university is its internationality. Amsterdam is very international making UvA the perfect place to start an international business career. The university has a high percentage of international students. I would love to be study among international students, because it is a great possibility to broaden my horizons and get in touch with people on an international scale. This I see as a clear advantage in pursuing a career in business and economics. Another good reason for me to join the UvA is its high standard of education. UvA is highly ranked and this attracts top professors. In addition, the wide range of top partner universities and student networks offer more possibilities to a better education.

    All this distinguishes UvA from other universities and is making my choice clear on at what as to which university I want to study. Thank you for considering my application. I would be very pleased to be granted admission for the fall term.
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