IELTS test, task2

[Faten.88]

Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge needed in the work place. Others think that they should give courses regardless of whether these courses are useful to an employer. What, in your opinion, should be the main function of a university?

This is a question from an IELTS test, so could you correct it, please?.


Schools and universities are the place where the generations are graduated. That means that graduates spend all the university life studying and learning, after that they will start the real life. Consequently, I think that these graduates should be provided with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace.

Employers in any field asked for experience from any one due to the fact that they know that students in the universities do not learn any useful Knowledge for workplace. Students just study courses regardless of whether these courses are benefit to an employer. For instance, if someone applies to any company even if it is governmental, they ask for experience and they do not want to use a new graduate.

In addition, graduates themselves do not feel confidence when they apply to any job since they know that their knowledge cannot service them in the work place. For example, if anyone studies an English teacher, universities will give him/her courses about English and the history of English but latter when he/she stops in front of students, this teacher will feel that he/she do not know anything about how to transfer the information to student.

Moreover, graduates need skills and knowledge to become a good worker and to develop their countries. No one can begin any job without experience or skills to help them. For example, any graduate should be provided with courses to teach them how to behave with people even if he/she study in any field.

In conclusion, In my opinion Universities should know and realize that graduates need skills that benefit them in the workplace. Therefore, they have to teach them what is benefit not just giving them courses without caring whether the courses are useful or not.

 

[Faten.88]

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[Faten.88]

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[Faten.88]

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[Gillnetter]

Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge needed in the work place. Others think that they should give courses regardless of whether these courses are useful to an employer. What, in your opinion, should be the main function of a university?

This is a question from an IELTS test, so could you correct it, please?.


Schools and universities are the place where the generations (No, generations are not graduated. Schools and universities are places where students are taught) are graduated. That means that [STRIKE]graduates [/STRIKE] students spend [STRIKE]all the university life [/STRIKE] their time studying and learning, after that they will start the real life (Real life starts when a person is born). Consequently, I think that these [STRIKE]graduates [/STRIKE] students (research the word "graduate") should be provided with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace.

Employers in any field [STRIKE]asked [/STRIKE] ask (asked is the past tense of "ask") for experience from any one due to the fact that they know that students in the universities do not learn any useful knowledge for the workplace. Students just study courses regardless of whether these courses [STRIKE]are [/STRIKE] will be a benefit to an employer. For instance, if someone applies to [STRIKE]any [/STRIKE]a company [STRIKE]even if it is governmental[/STRIKE] or to the government, they ask for experience and they do not want to use a new graduate.

In addition, graduates themselves do not feel confidence when they apply [STRIKE]to [/STRIKE] for any job since they know that their knowledge cannot [STRIKE]service [/STRIKE] serve them in the work place. For example, if anyone studies to be an English teacher, universities will give him/her courses about English and the history of English but [STRIKE]latter [/STRIKE] later when he/she [STRIKE]stops [/STRIKE] steps in front of students, this teacher will feel that he/she [STRIKE]do [/STRIKE] does not know anything about how to transfer the information to student.

Moreover, graduates need skills and knowledge to become a good worker and to develop their countries. No one can begin any job without experience or skills to help them (Not true. many people begin a job with no experience). For example, any graduate should be provided with courses to teach them how to behave with people. [STRIKE]even if he/she study in any field [/STRIKE](Usually, the matter of how to behave in public is taught by parents).

In conclusion, In my opinion, universities should know and realize that graduates need skills that benefit them in the workplace. Therefore, they have to teach them what is [STRIKE]benefit [/STRIKE] beneficial and not just [STRIKE]giving [/STRIKE] give them courses without caring whether the courses are useful or not (To learn about the teachings of Socrates or the reasons for the French Revolution may not seem to be helpful when applying for a job, but, in the long term, this knowledge is helpful in life as well as on the job).

You seem to be confused about the exact meanings of knowledge and experience. Knowledge is gained in school, as well as in life. Experience is gained by doing something. Schools are designed to teach knowledge. Experience, the type you are discussing, is gained while on a job.

 

[Faten.88]

Thank you very much for your correcting.
I think that universities should give a lot of practical courses for students which help them to start any job. I heard a lot of bosses who said that studying at the university is different from working and you have to forget every thing you have studied.