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    Could you pinpoint or suggest any thing about this essay? I would really appreciate any comment from spelling to organization ,grammmar to ideas,or even any comment you have in mind. :P :wink:


    Classical Elements in The Playboy of the Western World


    Classicism “is an attitude to literature that is guided by admiration of the qualities of formal balance, proportion, decorum, and a restraint attributed to the major works of ancient Greek and Roman literature.” A classical play is one that holds classical elements in its subject matter or form. The Playboy of the Western World contains several classical elements.

    The Playboy of the Western World, by John Willington Synge, is a dramatic, classical masterpiece. One of its outstanding characteristics is its unity of structure. Digression or superfluities are non-existent in this play. Everything in it is linked with the main theme. There is no sub-plot. There is only a single plot that develops without deviating from the major theme. The theme of this play is the change of a man’s character from a weak person to a hero through committing patricide. There is no extra information that mars the unity of the action in the play. Apart from the unity of action, we have the unity of time and place. Although we have the feeling that a long time has passed, the action of the play covers only “a revolution of the sun “, just twenty- four hours. As far as the unity of action is concerned, the entire action takes place in a shebeen located near the seashore of Mayo.


    Love-scenes are essential to the main theme. A similar theme in the play is the love affair, which develops between the major character, Christy, and the important, female character, Pegeen. The main love-scene between them is one of the most poetic scenes in the play. However, this love-scene does not disrupt the unity of action and does not interfere with the development of the main plot, which is the development of Christy’s character. In fact, the idea of love and marriage is put to support the main action. The love-scenes contribute considerably to Christy’s change of character.

    Just like the classical way, the opening dialogue serves as a good introduction to the hero, Christy. Pegeen is writing a letter that shows her marriage to Shawn is approaching. After Shawn enters the shebeen, the writer reveals to us that Pegeen does not like him. She mocks him saying that “It’s wonder, Shaneen, the Holy Father’d be taking notice of the likes of you …”She maintains that there are only insignificant, coward people in the village, and it seems that Shawn is one of them. At the same time, we learn that Pegeen’s father, Michael, is going to a wake and leaving her alone in the shebeen for the entire night. Shawn refuses to stay with her because he is afraid of Father Reilly .This, in turn, contributes to her resentment of him. He tells Pegeen of “a kind of fellow”, he heard groaning in a ditch.
    It is clear that Pegeen is welcoming any brave man. Furthermore, the conversation of the characters in the shebeen foreshadows that Michael will hire a pot-boy. Consequently, it prepares us for the coming of the main hero, Christy.


    The plot begins to unravel more and more; and the foundations for Christy becoming a hero are wonderfully laid. After Michael and his friends enter the shebeen, they are followed by “a kind of fellow”, Christy. Because of Christy’s suspense evoking investigation by Michael, Pegeen, and the others, he reveals that he had killed his father with a loy (a spade). The reaction of his listeners is encouraging to him. Philly says that Christy is not “a common week-day kind of murderer”. Even “the peelers” are afraid of him. Jimmy says that he is capable of facing a devil from hell. Pegeen says that he is both wise and brave. Moreover, she says that he is suitable to be hired by her father as a pot-boy in the shebeen. Then, he is offered the job, and he accepts the offer after being convinced that he will be safe there from the police. The foundations of Christy becoming a hero are laid in this scene where he receives praise from all those around him in the shebeen save Shawn, who criticizes him for committing a murder.

    Christy’ story of his past life is crucial to the play. Christy has already overcome his fears. Furthermore, his morale is raised by Pegeen, who admires his small feet, his name, and his ability to speak like a poet,”And I’ve heard all times it’s the poets are your like, fine fiery fellows with great rages when their temper is aroused.” Consequently, he tells her about his past, saying that he was insignificant person in his village and no one took notice of him except beasts. This tale of his past life is very important for the play because it makes us notice how the change in his personality (peripeteia: the reversal of the situation) will transpire.

    The fight between Widow Queen and Pegeen over Christy is important simply because it contributes to Christy’s realization and recognition of himself. Widow Queen arrives at the shebeen although it is too late at night. She attempts to convince the queer fellow, Christy, to spend the night at her house. The fight starts between the two women. This clash gives Christy more confidence .At the end of the Act, Christy expresses his satisfaction of the fact that the two women fight over him. Therefore, this new feeling of self-esteem marks an important step in Christy’s transformation. This soliloquy represents the first climax (turning point) in the play.


    Propriety is a classical characteristic of the hero. Christ behaves according to his status. Act II begins with Christy’s soliloquy that shows that he is satisfied with his job .He finds also that the mirror there shows him to be more handsome than the mirror in his village. After the girls and Widow Queen come to see him, he tells them his tale trying to make it sound as grand as he could. He includes some more details of his story. Susan says that his story is grand and Honor admires his way of telling the story. Christy, as an ordinary person, is made more self-assured by the girls’ praise. Afterwards, Pegeen comes and tells him that he is in danger because he is narrating his story to everyone. Demoralized, he readies himself to leave, but Pegeen says that he will be safe as far as he keeps himself away from everybody and especially the girls. This is the first anti-climax in the play.


    Just when Christy is feeling happy and self-assured, something happens to snatch that happiness and self-assurance away from him. Upon seeing his father coming to the shebeen, he hides himself behind the door. Widow Queen tackles the matter by telling Old Mahon wrong information about Christy. This coming back of Old Mahon is essential to the play because it gives a comic relief. If the patricide were actually committed, this would have been a gloomy effect on us. It also introduces a new character, whose speech is so comic.

    The arrival of Old Mahon in Act II had been a kind of comic reversal. Act III has two comic reversals like the previous one. At the beginning of Act III, we know from Jimmy and Philly talk that Christy has won a great deal of money and he has been declared a winner in many sports such as, racing, jumping “and the Lord knows what.” Old Mahon returns to the shebeen. He and the others, Jimmy, Philly and Widow Queen, at the shebeen watch the mule race. Christy wins the race adding that to his many victories. Christy, the “lier on walls” and “the talker of folly “in his village, has become the great champion in Mayo village. In fact, it is a great change .This is the second climax in the play. Old Mahon recognizes the champion as his own son, but Widow Queen succeeds, for the second time, in convincing him that he is not his son and that he is raving.


    Although, according to classicism standards, the writer should use lofty, sophisticated diction, Synge used the language of simple, vulgar people selectively. Christy receives prizes for his victories in the sports and finds himself alone with Pegeen, who feels proud of him. There is a highly rhetorical love-scene between them. Christy now reaches the peak of his achievement in Mayo by getting the promise from Pegeen that she would marry him within fortnight. Michael objects their proposed marriage, but he changes his mind upon seeing that Shawn is a coward and incapable of defending himself. This is also another climax in the play.

    Then, another comic reversal, which has tragic implications, takes place. Old Mahon comes back and begins to beat Christy. Upon seeing that Christy’s father is alive and beating him, Pegeen says that he must quit the place because he has told her lies. The people of the village have also turned against him for the same reason. In order to regain the esteem of Pegeen and the people of the village, he kills his father for the second time. However, they regard him as a criminal and not as a hero. This is another anti-climax in Christy’s career. The village people tied him up with ropes in order to hand him over to the police. Nevertheless, not having been killed by the second blow, Christ’s father comes back again. Christy is reconciled to his father and agrees to go back to his village on one condition: that he will be the leader from now on. Finally, he makes his speech, which shows that his change from a weak person to a hero is complete. This is the final climax in the play. He departs and leaves Pegeen with a broken heart.


    Ultimately, the play mostly conforms to classical canons. The three unities of time, place, and action are achieved. The plot is simple and has a beginning, middle, and an end .The hero is “true to life” and is introduced in a classical way. Finally, by arousing pity and fear the audience has attained “the purgation of emotions”.




    References:

    1- The original book: Synge,The PLAYBOY OF THE WESTERN WORLD, York Press,Immeuble Esseily,Place Raid Solh,Beirut,1998.

    2-RAMJI LALL, THE PLAYBOY OF THE WESTERN WORLD by J.M.SYNGE, BROTHERS,Twelfth Edition2000 .

    3- http://www.oobr.com/top/volFour/four/0928synge.html

    4- http://www.stthomas.edu/irishstudies/v4n4.htm

    5- http://www.toaca.ro/Thetre_project2.php

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    It's looks really good. It looks like it is quite well-written. However, for me to do any kind of in-depth critique you will first have to register as a member of the forum.

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    OK- first, I must confess that I haven't read the work, but the piece you have written reads well. I'd change this sentence a bit:
    Although, according to classicism standards (maybe just delete 'standards' or change it to the standards of classicism?), the writer should use lofty, sophisticated diction, Synge used the language of simple, vulgar (common\ordinary?)people selectively.

    I'll come back later tonight when I have some more time and comment further.

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    Why should I register ? That is not a good way of convincing a user to register ,is it?Anyhow, I have registered .Are you satisfied ?The only thing I do really look for is to get a wonderful company,just the like of you . The forum seems very new, is not it? :wink:

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    Why should I register ?
    I wasn't saying that you should. It's just that reading and critiqing something of that length is time-consuming. I just want to be fairly sure that what I post will be read. I realize that there are no guarantees of that, but I figure the chances are better if the person has registered as a member of the forum.

    One of the main reasons for registering is to get email notifications of messages.

    That is not a good way of convincing a user to register ,is it?
    Apparently, it worked. :wink:

    Anyhow, I have registered .Are you satisfied ?
    I guess. :wink:

    The only thing I do really look for is to get a wonderful company,just the like of you . The forum seems very new, is not it?
    It's a year old.



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    Newness is a relative thing. We are certainly newer than some.

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    Classical Elements in The Playboy of the Western World


    Classicism “is an attitude to literature that is guided by admiration of the qualities of formal balance, proportion, decorum, and a restraint attributed to the major works of ancient Greek and Roman literature.” A classical play is one that holds classical elements in its subject matter or form. The Playboy of the Western World contains several classical elements.
    Instead of attitude to literature say attitude towards literature . After the last sentence of that paragraph I would expect the writer to state what those classical elements are.

    It's a good start. The definition given for a classical play tho is rather too sparse, I think. What are classical elements?

    The Playboy of the Western World, by John Willington Synge, is a dramatic, classical masterpiece. One of its outstanding characteristics is its unity of structure. Digression or superfluities are non-existent in this play. Everything in it is linked with the main theme. There is no sub-plot. There is only a single plot that develops without deviating from the major theme. The theme of this play is the change of a man’s character from a weak person to a hero through committing patricide. There is no extra information that mars the unity of the action in the play.
    It's good, but it's somewhat repetitious.

    Apart from the unity of action, we have the unity of time and place.
    Rather than Apart from, say In addition to. Also, I think you can advantageously dispense with the definite article. Perhaps:

    • In addition to unity of action, we have unity of time and place.


    What do you think?

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    Although we have the feeling that a long time has passed, the action of the play covers only “a revolution of the sun “, just twenty- four hours. As far as the unity of action is concerned, the entire action takes place in a shebeen located near the seashore of Mayo.
    • Although we have the feeling that a long time has passed, the action of the play covers only the span of a day. As far as unity of action is concerned, the entire action takes place in a shebeen located near the seashore of Mayo.


    A revolution of the sun would be a year.

    Love-scenes are essential to the main theme. A similar theme in the play is the love affair, which develops between the major character, Christy, and the important, female character, Pegeen.
    • Love scenes are essential to the main theme. Part of the plot is the love affair which develops between the major character, Christy, and the important female character, Pegeen.


    The main love-scene between them is one of the most poetic scenes in the play. However, this love-scene does not disrupt the unity of action and does not interfere with the development of the main plot, which is the development of Christy’s character. In fact, the idea of love and marriage is put to support the main action. The love-scenes contribute considerably to Christy’s change of character.
    • The main love scene between them is one of the most romantic scenes in the play. However, this love scene does not disrupt the unity of action and does not interfere with the development of the main plot, which is the development of Christy’s character. In fact, the idea of love and marriage is put to support the main action. The love scenes contribute considerably to Christy’s change of character.


    Isn't it plotlines that contribute to plot? Shouldn't it be his relationship with his lover that changes his character?

    [Edited for spelling.]

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    1.First of all, I thank you, for your excellent feedback, but still you have not spoken about the organization and most importantly the ideas of the essay.

    2.By the way, is it grammatical (or more formal) to use “Also” in the beginning of a sentence?

    3.What do you think of this definition as an alternative to the previous one : “Classicism is the following of ancient Greek or Roman principles and style in art and literature, generally associated with harmony, restraint, and adherence to recognized standards of form and craftsmanship, especially from the Renaissance to the 18th century.”


    4.A revolution of the sun would be a year.

    Really, I thought it would be one day .What about “a revolution of earth” would it make any difference?

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    It's good, but it's somewhat repetitious.

    Could you pinpoint the repeated sentences ,plz?

    Finally, I do appreciate your cooperation both of you teacher,todl, and teacher ,RonBee. I also appreciate any comment ,or idea you will add to your valuable comments .



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    1. .First of all, I thank you, for your excellent feedback, but still you have not spoken about the organization and most importantly the ideas of the essay.
    It would be difficult for me to comment on the essay as a whole at this point, since I haven't yet read the whole thing. It does seem to be well-organized on the whole. The paragraphs are a manageable size.

    2.By the way, is it grammatical (or more formal) to use “Also” in the beginning of a sentence?
    Also is used at the beginning of a sentence to indicate that the sentence continues a thought begun with the previous sentence and adds something to it. It sometimes (but not always) performs a different function in the middle of a sentence. Neither way is more formal than the other. (Did I answer the question?)

    3.What do you think of this definition as an alternative to the previous one : “Classicism is the following of ancient Greek or Roman principles and style in art and literature, generally associated with harmony, restraint, and adherence to recognized standards of form and craftsmanship, especially from the Renaissance to the 18th century.”
    I think it is an excellent definition and is a marked improvement over the other one. :D

    4.A revolution of the sun would be a year.

    Really, I thought it would be one day .What about “a revolution of earth” would it make any difference?
    Possibly. I usually think of it as the earth revolving around the sun but rotating about its axis.

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    It's good, but it's somewhat repetitious.
    Could you pinpoint the repeated sentences ,plz?
    I'll have a go at it.

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    From the second paragraph:

    One of its outstanding characteristics is its unity of structure. Digression or superfluities are non-existent in this play. Everything in it is linked with the main theme. There is no sub-plot. There is only a single plot that develops without deviating from the major theme...There is no extra information that mars the unity of the action in the play.
    The reader is given the same information in every sentence. It is phrased in different ways, but it is the same thing. It is six sentences that could be pared to three.

    Does that help?

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