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    Lightbulb Help with translation.From Arabic to English.Free Verse.

    Hi everyone/teachers and members.

    Your help is greatly appreciated, all suggestions could be taken seriously. I'm trying to improve my skills regarding translation, I haven't practiced that lately and I know for sure how uneasy this could be, but we are learning after all.
    By the way no punctuation at all used by the poet in Arabic.


    waiting for you

    Waiting for you
    the street
    the passers-by
    the sellers
    the traffic men
    the door of the house
    the tiles
    the coat rack
    the plates
    the spoons
    and the milk cup.

    Scarecrow's field
    outside
    cities of narration
    crossed by faces without echo

    They departed
    leaving behind
    cups and plates
    yesterday's dinner
    and a package of expressions

    This little room
    walls covered with my photos
    the bed
    the orange cloth
    the dull make up table
    its mirror
    surprised my void.



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    Default Re: Help with translation.From Arabic to English.Free Verse.

    Why do you use the two full-stops?

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    Default Re: Help with translation.From Arabic to English.Free Verse.

    Quote Originally Posted by Tdol View Post
    Why do you use the two full-stops?
    hmmmm a good question. Somehow I felt like only those were needed, I could be wrong.

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    Default Re: Help with translation.From Arabic to English.Free Verse.

    Well, the lack of comments make me feel that I've done great work lol.... Please et me know if the piece doesn't make sense in English.

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    Default Re: Help with translation.From Arabic to English.Free Verse.

    It depends what you mean by sense- it wouldn't work as prose, but it evokes meaning. And I did like the last two lines of the second verse.

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    Default Re: Help with translation.From Arabic to English.Free Verse.

    Thank you, I think emphasizing on the imagery withing every line made this piece poetry rather than prose, despite the fact, it's sometimes difficult for me to differentiate.

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