According to you, it's the following example good to say in written English or not?
I would like to use two invented people to make a good example but I don't know whether is good or not.
I'll help myself with two fake students, Jonh and Mark. Jonh goes to school everyday and he follows every classes. Mark is always at home and he skips schools. Probably, Jonh's marks would be higher than Mark's one, ever if Mark studies everyday more than Jonh. This happens because Jonh goes to school amd he pays attention to the teacher and this is more important than study alone at home.
Thanks in advance
I wrote the sentence "I'll help myself with two fake students" because my example will start in the middle of my essay. For example: I need to write an essay about skipping class or not. When I stat, I would say the reason why, in my opinion, it's better to attend class. Then, to add and example, I would say "I'll help myselfwith two fake students". I don't know if I help you to understand what I mean. It's a sort of "introduction" for the example I'm going to write.
Second of all, I don't undestand a correction you made:
- in the phrase "John's marks would probably be higher than Mark's one" why is the word "one" wrong? I mean in written English subject is compulsory;
This is the reason why I'm writing a lot
Remember - correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing make posts much easier to read.