Re: Please correct my grammar
Welcome to the forum.
I have moved your thread to the Editing and Writing Topics section which is more appropriate.
The first thing you should do is click the "Edit Post" button on your post and capitalise the word "I" (first person singular) every time it appears. You also need to capitalise the first word of every sentence. When you have typed "its" and it is short for "it is", you need to add an apostrophe - it should be "it's". Make those changes (don't forget to save the changes) and then we will look at the rest.
Remember - correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing make posts much easier to read.