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taylordib

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i got this sentence off the internet but i want to change it into my own words, could you please change it into something an 8th grader/year 8 student would write :)

Violence against women is a systemic, social problem rooted in persistent gender inequity, and is often marred by myths and misconceptions. The media isn’t solely responsible for this; we all participate in sustaining this status quo. Nevertheless, news media inform us, and has a responsibility to do so accurately. And it’s in this space where our research can be of benefit.
 

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Welcome to the forum, taylordib. :Hi:
i got this sentence off the internet but i want to change it into my own words, could you please change it into something an 8th grader/year 8 student would write :)
We can't change it into your words!

If you'd like to try to simplify it yourself, we can correct and comment on your work.

Please remember to use a capital letter for the pronoun I.
 

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And note that it's not a sentence: it's a paragraph.
 

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If you'd like to try to simplify it yourself, we can correct and comment on your work.

Unless it is homework! :up:

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<<<Nevertheless, news media inform us, and has a responsibility to do so accurately.>>>

This sentence is not correct. Most people see "media" as plural; some use it as singular. But you have used it both ways.

Use either "media inform us" and "have the responsibility" (preferred) or
"media informs us" and "has the responsibility".
 
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