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    Default layout wording

    Is the wording of the following layout acceptable to native speakers?

    Internet Addiction in Junior High School Students
    Written by Sarah Zeng (910), Regina Zhou (910) & Kelly He (916)
    Commented and corrected by Tony Luo
    Correction date: March, 2013

    p.s. The italics are the title, and the parentheses stand for class.

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    Default Re: layout wording

    I'd embolden the title and delete 'Commented and'.

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    Internet Addiction in Junior High School Students
    Written by Sarah Zeng (910), Regina Zhou (910) & Kelly He (916)
    Corrected by Tony Luo
    Correction date: March, 2013


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    Default Re: layout wording

    I would suggest "edited" instead of "corrected."
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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    Default Re: layout wording

    Internet Addiction in Junior High School Students
    by Sarah Zeng (910), Regina Zhou (910) & Kelly He (916)
    March 2013

    Edited by Tony Luo

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