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Anna0503

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Hi everybody! :)

i am going to apply for master program in Germany, and there is needed to answer 5 questions. I can assume, this is kind of alternative to statement letter. So I would be grateful if someone could look it through and correct if there are mistakes.
Question: What has been your international exposure (academic and/or professional experience)
My answer: In addition to my academics and the internship program, I participated in both the “work and travel” program for cultural exchange in the United States and the Au Pair program here in Germany. I had an opportunity to practice in creating connections with people from different cultures. This experience helped me to develop my cross-cultural communication skills needed for my future career in International Business area.

Thank you!

Best regards,

Anna
 

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Hi everybody! :)

i am going to apply for a master program in Germany, and there is [STRIKE] needed [/STRIKE] a requirement to answer 5 questions. I can assume that this is a kind of alternative to statement (?) letter. So I would be grateful if someone could look it through and correct if there are mistakes.
Question: What has been your international exposure (academic and/or professional experience)
My answer: In addition to my academic [STRIKE]s[/STRIKE] background and [STRIKE] the [ /STRIKE] an internship program, I participated in both the “Work and Travel” program for cultural exchange in the United States and the "Au Pair" program here in Germany. I had [STRIKE] an [/STRIKE] the opportunity to practice in [STRIKE] creating [/STRIKE] establishing connections with people from different cultures. This experience helped me to develop my cross-cultural communication skills needed for my future career in international business. [STRIKE] area.[/STRIKE]

Thank you!

Best regards,

Anna

Nice intro, a few suggestions. I assume you will include/attach a formal CV. Good luck. :up:
 

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