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    Default Could you correct my essay, please?

    I have to write problem essay for tomorrow. At this moment it looks as below.

    How to reduce crime rate in the cities?

    According to a report, 2011 on the subject of Crime in Poland by the Ministry of Home Affairs, crime rate is escalating.

    The report shows that in 2012 Polish citizens committed 1, 159 ,554 crimes. This is a 1.8% increase in comparison with 2011. Fortunately, there are a number of possible solutions which could de-escalate that serious process.

    One way would be to extend the public monitoring network in the cities. It is obvious that if a potential delinquent is aware of being observed by security camera, then he will not commit a crime. It will also increase the number of criminals being caught red-handed. When we consider using technology in the fight against crime it is worth to investing in aggrandizement of street lighting.
    Another solution would be to increase the number of patrolling police.

    Additionally, it may cause increase arrest rates. The research shows that upswing of police operations has an astonishing impact on the decrease of transgression. It also proves that crime rate falls away in the immaculate places, where presumptive damage is quickly fix. The similar effect is achieved by the intensification of punishments.

    The next good idea is to start looking into the ethical education of young people. In Poland just few percent of students attend ethical lessons. Furthermore, that opportunity have only the people who do not attend religion lessons. Therefore a lot of schools do not offer ethical lessons. This is a big mistake, because the young people do not have the chance to learn the right behaviour patterns outside the family environment. Polish schools neglect civil education which would help the student to understand how to be a good citizen.

    The most effective method to reduce the crime rate, however, is to fight with problems causing society sourness , like unemployment, poverty, low wages, high prices. Due to the fact that preventing those problems is extremely complex, fulfilment of this particular point is hard, but brings the best effects. . High life standard will eliminate causes of rubbery, vandalism or struggles bring about frustration, etc.

    All in all, there are many solutions to the problem of crime. The crime rate does not have to increase, and the faster the Polish government takes extra measures, the faster a situation will become better.
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