[Essay] My Summer Vacation

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modakindia

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I shall be highly obliged if you kindly help me to correct the following essay.

Summer vacation is probably the happiest period in my life. The vacation started on 16[SUP]th[/SUP] May and ended on 9[SUP]th[/SUP] June.
The purpose of the summer vacation is to tide over the unbearable heat of the summer months. The other purpose is to provide a chance me to make up my deficiency subjects. It also gives an opportunity to me to visit new places.
I visited to my aunty’s home at Dhakuria, Kolkata for 8 days. I enjoyed with my brother-in-law, Saheb by visiting Science City, Victoria Memorial Hall and Nicco Park.
I came back at home stayed for 7 days. Again I visited to my native place, Chandannagar for 9 days. I met with my father-in-law and mother-in-law. I enjoyed with them very much during my holidays.
I returned at home on 1[SUP]st[/SUP] June. I used to study English, Math and Science very well and completed my Home Work.
The summer vacation was a happy experience for me and its memory is still green in my mind.
 

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Summer vacation was probably the happiest period in my life. The vacation started on the 16[SUP]th[/SUP] May and ended on the 9[SUP]th[/SUP]of June.
The purpose of the summer vacation was to get through the unbearable heat of the summer months. The other purpose was to provide a chance me to make up my deficient subjects. It also gives me an opportunity to visit new places.

I visited to my aunty’s home at Dhakuria, Kolkata for 8 days. I enjoyed being with my brother-in-law, Saheb, by visiting Science City, Victoria Memorial Hall and Nicco Park.

I came back home and stayed for 7 days. Again I visited my native place, Chandannagar, for 9 days. I met with my father-in-law and mother-in-law. I enjoyed being with them very much during my holidays.

I returned at home on the 1[SUP]st [/SUP]of June. I studied English, Math, and Science very well and completed my homework.
The summer vacation was a happy experience for me and its memory is still green in my mind.
 

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Modakindia, when are you going to submit this essay to your teacher?
 
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