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    VIC (Very important CV) :)

    Hello everybody,

    could someone please look through my cover letter. I couldnīt find anyone to help me, but it is very important to finally get a job.

    Thanks in advance!

    Dear Mr. Jarman,

    Especially as a native Iranian I perceive the activities of the ZIF as very valuable and important. Particularly when the majority of the own family lives in a conflict area, it is good to know that outsiders take a stand for peaceful conditions in other parts of the world. To guarantee this, good international and intercultural understandings are therefore indispensable.

    Beyond my Iranian skills, during my studies and especially during my semester abroad in Clermont- Ferrand in France, I had the possibility to develop very well and apply my English and French skills. Another part of my studies were cultural studies courses, which I followed with great interest. To acquire additional basic knowledge I am currently attending a further education in economics. Courses I already attended include Public Relations and culture management among others.

    Self- evidently, I possess not least due to correlating EDP courses during my studies excellent general computer literacy and particular text and information processing program skills as well as spreadsheets (MS Office). As I identify strongly with the field of activities of the ZIF and as I am willing to learn something new, the position is perfect for me.

    To get an idea of me and my strengths, I am willing to perform an internship in advance. Furthermore, the agency for employment grants a settling- in grant in case of recruitment.

    I am of course ready to move to Berlin and could then take up the position immediately.

    Sincerely,

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    Re: VIC (Very important CV) :)

    Quote Originally Posted by LionQueen87 View Post
    Hello everybody,

    could someone please look through my cover letter. I couldnīt find anyone to help me, but it is very important to finally get a job.

    Thanks in advance!

    Dear Mr. Jarman,

    Especially As a native Iranian I perceive the activities of the ZIF as very valuable and important. Particularly when the majority of the my own family lives in a conflict area, it is good to know that outsiders take a stand for peaceful conditions in other parts of the world. To guarantee this, good international and intercultural understandings are therefore indispensable.

    Beyond my Iranian skills (And...what are these skills? Do you mean your ability to speak in your native language? If so, then write something like, "Beyond my advanced skills in Farsi... [If Farsi is the language you are referring to], during my studies, and especially during my semester abroad in Clermont- Ferrand in France, I had the possibility opportunity to develop very well and apply both my English and French skills. Another part of my studies were cultural studies courses, which I followed with great interest. To acquire additional basic knowledge I am currently attending a further education class in economics. Courses I already attended include public relations and culture management, among others.

    Self- evidently, I possess not least due to correlating EDP courses during my studies excellent general computer literacy and particularly text and information processing program skills, as well as spreadsheets (MS Office). As I identify strongly with the field of activities of the ZIF and as I am willing to learn something new, the position is perfect for me. (This is the problem one sees in most cover letters - what is good for you, what you want. The person reading this letter is looking to advance his/her organization. What can you do to help this reader see that you are the best candidate?)

    To get an idea of me and my strengths, I am willing to perform an internship in advance. Furthermore, the agency for employment grants a settling (What is a "settling")- in grant in case of recruitment.

    I am, of course, ready to move to Berlin and could then take up the position immediately.

    Sincerely,
    I haven't see the acronym EDP in years. Is it still used in computer sciences?

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    Re: VIC (Very important CV) :)

    Quote Originally Posted by Gillnetter View Post
    I haven't see the acronym EDP in years. Is it still used in computer sciences?
    Thank you very much for the correction!!
    I found EDP as well as settling- in grant in the dictionary. Iīm not sure weather itīs used frequently. I wanted to say that the agency for employment grants some kind of money for the company when they take me.

    Do you mean it would be better to change the sentence "...the position is perfect for me" to "I am perfect for the company"?

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    Re: VIC (Very important CV) :)

    Quote Originally Posted by LionQueen87 View Post
    Especially as a native Iranian ...
    I am curious. Your CV say that you are Iranian, but your UE profile says that you are German. Which is correct?
    Last edited by emsr2d2; 10-Jun-2013 at 08:23.

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    Re: VIC (Very important CV) :)

    Quote Originally Posted by 5jj View Post
    I am curious. Your CV say that you are Iranian, but your UE profile says that you are German. Which is correct?
    I live in Germany, but my mother is there from ;) (father is German too)

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    Re: VIC (Very important CV) :)

    Quote Originally Posted by LionQueen87 View Post
    Thank you very much for the correction!!
    I found EDP as well as settling-in grant in the dictionary. Iīm not sure weather whether itīs used frequently. I wanted to say that the agency for employment grants some kind of money for the company when they take me.

    Do you mean it would be better to change the sentence "...the position is perfect for me" to "I am perfect for the company"?
    If you're going to say "I am perfect for the company" you will have to back that up with the reasons why you would be such a perfect employee.

    I would have thought that a "settling-in grant" would be money given to the new employee to help them to move to a new city, perhaps money to help with furniture removal costs or travel costs. I've never heard the phrase but I wouldn't have guessed that the money is given to the company.

    As 5jj said, please make sure your profile information is correct.
    Remember - correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing make posts much easier to read.

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    Re: VIC (Very important CV) :)

    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    If you're going to say "I am perfect for the company" you will have to back that up with the reasons why you would be such a perfect employee.

    I would have thought that a "settling-in grant" would be money given to the new employee to help them to move to a new city, perhaps money to help with furniture removal costs or travel costs. I've never heard the phrase but I wouldn't have guessed that the money is given to the company.

    As 5jj said, please make sure your profile information is correct.
    It is correct :) I was born in Germany, I live here and my passport is German. Only my mother is not German ;)

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    Re: VIC (Very important CV) :)

    Quote Originally Posted by LionQueen87 View Post
    It is correct :) I was born in Germany, I live here and my passport is German. Only my mother is not German ;)
    OK, I see your profile information is now correct. Your mother would be able to say "As a native Iranian" because she was born there. You are German, with Iranian ancestry.
    Remember - correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing make posts much easier to read.

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