[Essay] be blind to

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Ashiuhto

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Please help me correct the following paragraph. Thanks!

In my public service career, I have frequently encountered many all-embracing social problems. I calmly observe these problems and analyze the phenomena. They are worrying us. Our society is seriously sick, and we can’t be blind to the gravity of the illness.
 

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In my public service career, I have frequently encountered many all-embracing social problems. I calmly observe these problems and analyze the occurrences. They are worrying us. Our society is seriously sick, and we can’t be blind to the gravity of the illness.
 

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Who are you referring to when you say "They are worrying us" and "... we​ can't be blind to ..."? You have only spoken about your experience up until that point.
 
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