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Dear Hiring Manager,

I would like to express my interest in the "*****" position for your publishing company.
As engineer with experience in the Telco field, with the passion of I.T. word, with the fascination of gaming computers and with an eclectic mind, I believe I am a good candidate for the position.

I believe that the “****” is the dynamic job I am looking for, which strains and improves my abilities day by day, putting me in contacts with the different areas of the company.

Thank you so much for your time and consideration.
Sincerely


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Dear Hiring Manager,

I would like to express my interest in the "*****" position of your publishing company.
As an engineer with experience in the Telco field, with a passion for the IT world, with a fascination for gaming computers and with an eclectic mind, I believe I am a good candidate for the position.

I believe that the “****” is the dynamic job I am looking for, which tests and improves my abilities day by day by putting me in contact with the different areas of the company.

Thank you so much for your time and consideration.

Sincerely,