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    Cool Is this sentence correct grammatically?

    'The trembling due to the excitation was quickly replaced by the trembling owing to the cold water.'




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    A man is (sexually) excited. But he wants to get rid of that excitement. So, he runs to the nearest river ( brook), enters into the water and lays down on the stones. After a while, the trembling due to the excitation was quickly replaced by the trembling owing to the cold water.

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    Default Re: Is this sentence correct grammatically?

    Yes, it's grammatical, but "excitement", would be better than "excitation".

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    Default Re: Is this sentence correct grammatically?

    Note that " after a while" does not pair with "quickly."
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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    Default Re: Is this sentence correct grammatically?

    If you use "arousal" (arousal - definition of arousal by Macmillan Dictionary) there needn't be such a long explanation on context, by the way.
    Please be aware that I'm neither a native English speaker nor a teacher.

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