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    Which sentence is right? Why?

    It is the dress that he designed for first lady has been recognized one of the most elegant gowns and enabled him to enjoy his accomplishment in fashion.

    The long sentence above is original version in a student workbook.

    However, I think it should be "It is the dress that he designed for first lady having been recognized one of the most elegant gowns and enabling him to enjoy his accomplishment in fashion."

    Am I right?

    Please do not rewrite the original version into a sentence you consider proper. It is an already existing part of reading material in a workbook, so your useful comments on the sentence structure or word choice may add complexity to the sentence which I will have to explain to someone.
    Thanks a lot.
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    #2

    Re: Which sentence is right? Why?

    Quote Originally Posted by terrenziqq View Post
    It is the dress that he designed for first lady has been recognized one of the most elegant gowns and enabled him to enjoy his accomplishment in fashion.

    The long sentence above is original version in a student workbook.

    However, I think it should be "It is the dress that he designed for first lady having been recognized one of the most elegant gowns and enabling him to enjoy his accomplishment in fashion."

    Am I right?

    Please do not rewrite the original version into a sentence you consider proper. It is an already existing part of reading material in a workbook, so your useful comments on the sentence structure or word choice may add complexity to the sentence which I will have to explain to someone.
    Thanks a lot.
    Neither one is correct.

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    #3

    Re: Which sentence is right? Why?

    Quote Originally Posted by terrenziqq View Post

    Please do not rewrite the original version into a sentence you consider proper.
    I don't know how we're going to answer your question without rewriting such a bad sentence.

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    #4

    Re: Which sentence is right? Why?

    Neither is correct, sorry.

    It should be written something like............

    The dress that he designed for the first lady, was recognized as one of the most elegant gowns. Consequently, this enabled him to enjoy his accomplishment in fashion.

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    Re: Which sentence is right? Why?

    Quote Originally Posted by hellohellohello View Post
    It should be written something like............

    The dress that he designed for the first lady, was recognized as one of the most elegant gowns. Consequently, this enabled him to enjoy his accomplishment in fashion.
    The comma in the first sentence is wrong. The 'consequently' is something of an additional thought; 'and' after 'gowns' is quite sufficient.

    Are you really an Armenian speaker from Angola? If not, please give the correct information in your profile.

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    Re: Which sentence is right? Why?

    Ouch, let me take back my words. If the sentence can be modified with slightest changes to make it grammatical, how will you rewrite it?

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    #7

    Re: Which sentence is right? Why?

    Quote Originally Posted by 5jj View Post

    Are you really an Armenian speaker from Angola? If not, please give the correct information in your profile.
    Additionally, hellohellohello, please read this extract from the forum's Posting Guidelines:

    You are welcome to answer questions posted in the Ask a Teacher forum as long as your suggestions, help, and advice reflect a good understanding of the English language. If you are not a teacher, you will need to state that clearly at the top of your post.

    Thank you,

    Rover

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