Re: Please correct obvious mistakes in the tale. Google cannot help
Welcome to the forum.
I think you have misunderstood how this forum works. For a start, your post is far too long. We are all volunteers here, doing this in our free time. We expect users to ask one question per thread and that question should be about a specific aspect of the English language.
Did you write all these sentences? Have you taken them from somewhere else? If the latter, you must give your source.
Why did you think that Google would help you with these sentences?
Remember - correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing make posts much easier to read.