Re: Help on an essay
Austin, I'm sorry, but we can't help you with your essay before you turn it in. Your teacher needs to see your work, and not ours. If you get it back and your teacher has made corrections or comments you don't understand, please ask us about them. As a very general comment, I think your essay is too casual.
As for MLA, there are some good online resources. I had to do something using it recently and I think I googled something like "Proper MLA format" and got all sorts of helpful sites.
I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.