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    Omar Marrow is offline Newbie
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    Post convience foods are easy to prepare

    HI , English teachers
    Actually, I want to know your opinion in this Paragraph ?
    and If I have mistakes and what about unity



    Convenience foods


    Convenience foods are easy to prepare. Preparations of foods don't need much effort to cook. It is just need to heat it, and takes a few minutes to be ready for eating. Once time, my exam was about to start and I will be late and I hadn't had a breakfast, moreover, I opened canned bean and heated it, and had breakfast. Also, convenience foods aren't taken much time to eat, in less than five minutes. Besides, easy storage helps prepare foods to be easy and fast.


    thank you for reading and your comments

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    Default Re: convience foods are easy to prepare

    Homework?

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    Default Re: convience foods are easy to prepare

    Quote Originally Posted by billmcd View Post
    Homework?


    no , really I want to improve my writing skills
    and I decide to write more

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    Default Re: convience foods are easy to prepare

    Quote Originally Posted by Omar Marrow View Post
    HI Hi, (no space before a comma) English teachers Unnecessary

    Actually Unnecessary I want would like to know your opinion in on this paragraph. ? (No question mark required - you did not ask a question.)

    and Also, If have I have made mistakes? and what about unity (I don't know what you mean by "unity".)



    Convenience foods


    Convenience foods are easy to prepare.

    Preparations of foods don't need much effort to cook.
    They do not need much preparation or much effort to cook.

    It is just need to heat it, and takes a few minutes to be ready for eating.
    They just need to be heated for a few minutes and then they are ready to eat.

    Once time, my exam was about to start and I will be late and I hadn't had a breakfast
    On one occasion, I was due to have an exam but I was going to be and I hadn't had breakfast.

    moreover, I opened canned bean and heated it, and had breakfast.
    I opened a can of beans, heated them and ate them for breakfast.

    Also, convenience foods aren't taken much time to eat, in less than five minutes.
    Also, convenience foods do not take much time to eat - less than five minutes.

    Besides, easy storage helps prepare foods to be easy and fast.
    In addition, they are easy to store.


    Thank you for reading and for your comments.

    Please see my amendments. I have broken your piece into individual sentences and dealt with them one at a time. Look carefully at your use of tenses, of the active and the passive. As you can see, you made a lot of errors.
    Remember - correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing make posts much easier to read.

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    Omar Marrow is offline Newbie
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    Default Re: convience foods are easy to prepare

    thank you very much.
    I can see new amendments.

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    Default Re: convience foods are easy to prepare

    No, really, I want to improve my writing skills, so I have decided to write more.

    Start sentences with capitals. End sentences with a period, exclamation point, or question mark.

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    Default Re: convience foods are easy to prepare

    Thank you very much. I can see the new changes.

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    Default Re: convience foods are easy to prepare

    thank you Mr Charlie Bernstein.

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