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    charged for driving under Section 65 Chapter 567 and was fined $800 and disqualoified

    The driver of car ABC12345 has been charged for driving under Section 65 Chapter 567 and was fined $800 and disqualoified of all licence for the period of 3 months.

    I find the above sentence awkward. Could someone please improve on the sentence?

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    Re: charged for driving under Section 65 Chapter 567 and was fined $800 and disqualoi

    Quote Originally Posted by Tan Elaine View Post
    The driver of car ABC12345 has been charged for driving under Section 65 Chapter 567 and was fined $800 and disqualoified of all licence for the period of 3 months.

    I find the above sentence awkward. Could someone please improve on the sentence?

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    For a start, you need to say what the charge actually is. At the moment, it appears they have been charged with "driving", an activity which I am pretty sure is not illegal.

    I would go with something like "The driver of car registration number ABC12345 has been charged with driving without due care and attention, under Section 65 of Chapter 567 of the Road Traffic Act 1991. He/she was fined $800 and disqualified from driving for a period of three months".
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: charged for driving under Section 65 Chapter 567 and was fined $800 and disqualoi

    Where did that sentence come from, Tan Elaine? It's written in terrible English.

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    Re: charged for driving under Section 65 Chapter 567 and was fined $800 and disqualoi

    Quote Originally Posted by Rover_KE View Post
    Where did that sentence come from, Tan Elaine? It's written in terrible English.
    It should surprise you. The letter is from the police department where I live.

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    Re: charged for driving under Section 65 Chapter 567 and was fined $800 and disqualoi

    Quote Originally Posted by Tan Elaine View Post
    It should surprise you. The letter is from the police department where I live.
    That does not surprise me at all. I have seen some printed stuff put out by British police forces.

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    Re: charged for driving under Section 65 Chapter 567 and was fined $800 and disqualoi

    Quote Originally Posted by 5jj View Post
    That does not surprise me at all. I have seen some printed stuff put out by British police forces.
    I thought that the British, being native speakers, should be able to write simple grammatical sentences. The letter I posted was written by a non-native speaker, so it is not so surprising! No wonder a native speaker I spoke to recently got some of her tenses mixed up. Thanks for the information.

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