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    Default Re: have a problem in academic IELTS writing

    I think that good, clear writing is 70% good, clear thinking and 20% grammar/syntax and 10% good style.

    I think someone writing in a second language will have the hardest time with the style. You still have some work to do on the other 90%. Why don't you write your response to that prompt again, but in good, clear sentences following a good, clear plan?
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    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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    Default Re: have a problem in academic IELTS writing

    according to these scores any recommendations to improve the writing ???
    Dear Santonica,

    When it comes to writing better, I like to follow Larry King's advice: "Write. Rewrite. When not writing or rewriting, read."

    You can write on this forum, and I'm sure you will get feedback.
    You've already received some, and I would be happy to help too!

    I also use these other two places to write regularly: Medium (https://medium.com/) and DailyThem.es (http://www.dailythem.es).
    I personally prefer the latter because there's often good peer feedback.

    For reading, I suggest the New York Times (The New York Times - Breaking News, World News & Multimedia) and the Economist (The Economist - World News, Politics, Economics, Business & Finance).
    I find the New York times a lighter read.

    Good luck!

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    Default Re: have a problem in academic IELTS writing

    Experimental science is one type of many fields that has been evolved in the recent years.This justified by the large amount of experiments that have been carried on animals.


    Okay here we go - let's try to edit this:

    that has been evolved
    That has evolved

    This justified
    This is (?) justified

    in the recent years
    in recent years

    have been carried on animals
    have been carried out on animals

    in the recent years
    in recent years

    This justified by the large amount of experiments that have been carried on animals.
    What does this sentence mean? Are you trying to say: "This was made possible by the large amount of ..." OR "This has justified the large amount of ..."? These two are very different meanings.

    large amount of
    "amount" is used for uncountable nouns (like oxygen). For countable nouns like "experiments", use "many" or, if you must, "large number of experiments".

    I'm SO sorry for such detailed edits. If it makes you unhappy or depressed, I'm super sorry - just let me know and I'll stop!

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    Default Re: have a problem in academic IELTS writing

    Absolutely,not.I am not angry with you because of your corrections. I n fact, I have to say that those details I might know well but when someone pointed to them, its great.
    Also next time when I am going to write again those points would be considered so, I can upgrade my writing and get the lost half mark.
    So, go on with the corrections and I will post more to get more advices and corrections.
    Thank you for doing this work for me.

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    Default Re: have a problem in academic IELTS writing

    If you encouraged me with some valuable advices and notes like this,I will reset an appointment for the IELTS exam and celebrate the triumph here with you all.

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    Default Re: have a problem in academic IELTS writing

    I would take some time and practise before rushing in.

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    Quote Originally Posted by santonica View Post
    If you encouraged me with some valuable advices and notes like this,I will reset an appointment for the IELTS exam and celebrate the triumph here with you all.
    It seems that I have just managed to write a clear sentence without errors. Previously,I posted her my opinion about reading news papers are sometimes irrelevant to IELTS topics. Now, my opinion has changed as I found out on BBC website plenty of topics either written or audio presentations that help. I can rewrite some of them here so we can discuse over them.

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    Default Re: have a problem in academic IELTS writing

    I wonder when I will be able to post a complete essay of 250 words ?
    In other words, what is the minimum posts that I have to make to be able to write long posts like that. I wrote an excellent essay yesterday but it has not appeared. I can not stand losing more . So are there any thing I can do to overcome this ?

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    Quote Originally Posted by santonica View Post
    I wonder when I will be able to post a complete essay of 250 words ?
    You can write one or copy and paste one here now.

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    Default Re: have a problem in academic IELTS writing

    Do you mean that I have to write the question first or the arguments being discussed ?
    I thought I can not post it as my posts is still under minimum limit to do so.

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