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    Default Kenny Everett sketch

    One of Kenny Everett's regular sketches was about a man who was behind speaker's stand preaching vehemently, how decadent the society had turned to and how immorally people had behaved themselves, but when he got out of the stand, he seemed to be almost naked from the waist down wearing only women's lingerie and high heels and then walked away in a flamboyant way, waving hips like a lady.
    This is how I tried to describe the sketch, but I'm sure there are mistakes and the sentence is very long.Is there better way of describing it and could you please correct the mistakes

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    Default Re: Kenny Everett sketch

    "One of Kenny Everett's regular sketches was about a man who was behind a speaker's podium, preaching vehemently about how decadent society had become and how immorally people behaved themselves. However, when he appeared from behind the podium, he seemed to be almost naked from the waist down, wearing only womens' lingerie and high heels. At this point, he then walked off flamboyantly, waving his hips like a lady."

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    Default Re: Kenny Everett sketch

    Thanks Coffa it sounds to me more reasonable now.
    Moreover your version made me laugh while mine didn't.
    It's amazing, how right choice of words and structure have good impact on it.

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    Default Re: Kenny Everett sketch

    Quote Originally Posted by ARCHIE
    Thanks Coffa it sounds to me more reasonable now.
    Moreover your version made me laugh while mine didn't.
    It's amazing, how right choice of words and structure have good impact on it.
    You're welcome, but your version was pretty good. I only added a few nuances and corrected the couple of occasions where you missed articles or personal pronouns. These are always the hardest aspects for non-native English speakers because I find English tends to use articles in a very inconsistent way, and to a greater degree than many other languages.

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    Default Re: Kenny Everett sketch

    I don't like 'how immorally people behaved themselves'

    But I don't know why. Is it the adverb used before 'behaved themselves'?

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