Please edit my introduction

[Zina Patton]

Should Same Sex Partners have the right to Adopt and Foster Children?
There are many children in the United States that are existing without the basic birth right of having two parents and in some cases, not having even one parent. In the United States, some states have elected to set limitations on fulfilling this basic birth right by denying otherwise qualified individuals the right to foster and adoption children based on sexual orientation. Should Same Sex Partners be denied the right to adopt and foster children?

 

[emsr2d2]

Should Same Sex Partners have the right to Adopt and Foster Children?
There are many children in the United States that are existing without the basic birth right of having two parents and in some cases, not having even one parent. In the United States, some states have elected to set limitations on fulfilling this basic birth right by denying otherwise qualified individuals the right to foster and adoption children based on sexual orientation. Should Same Sex Partners be denied the right to adopt and foster children?

Welcome to the forum.
When will you submit your piece for marking?

 

[mglad]

Hey Zina,

Some suggested edits:

> in the United States that are existing without
in the United States who exist without

> the right to foster and adoption children
the right to foster and adopt children

Besides that it seems fair enough.
Good luck!

 

[emsr2d2]

mglad, I believe someone has already pointed out to you in another post that we do not help with homework. The OP has yet to answer my query about when this homework is due (if it is homework). Any editing or suggestions given to posters when they are going to submit that piece of work constitute, at best, an unfair advantage over their classmates and, at worst, cheating. Please refrain from making any comment on written pieces until it has been established if homework/assignments are involved.

 

[emsr2d2]

Should same-sex partners have the right to adopt and foster children?
There are many children in the United States that are existing without the basic birth right of having two parents and in some cases, not having even one parent. In the United States, some states have elected to set limitations on fulfilling this basic birth right by denying otherwise qualified individuals the right to foster and adopt children based on sexual orientation. Should same-sex partners be denied the right to adopt and foster children?

rw6236, you first posted this on 10 October 2013. Are you really still working on the same short piece?