[Essay] some nice love words

[lazi]

Hello Helping Hands!
I felt in love with a girls but it is a kind of hopeless Romeo and Juliet relationship. Maybe there will be a break up or a happy end, who knows. I am thinking of giving her a lovely Xmas present just in case. Some nice words showing her the deep of my love but could be also the last farewell words.
Please let me have your comments on this:

Thank you for coming into my life
and giving me joy
Thank you for loving me and
receiving my love in return
Thank you for the memories
I will cherish forever
Thank you for the moments
I get lost irretrievable in your eyes
Thank you for the places
I could hold you in my arms
Thank you for the smiling lips
glowing the tenderly kisses ever
Thank you for the days and nights
touching your skin makes me fly high
Thank you for showing purest love in a hopeless time
Thank you for being the "Liebste"
I'll be always loving you...

Thanks!

lazi

 

[mglad]

That is so wonderful, Lazi - I really hope things work out!

Here are a few small edits:

Thank you for coming into my life
and giving me joy
Thank you for loving me and
receiving my love in return
Thank you for the memories
I will cherish forever
Thank you for the moments
I spent, lost in your eyes
Thank you for the places
Where I held you in my arms
Thank you for the smiling, ever-glowing lips
I kissed so tenderly
Thank you for the days and nights
We spent, and will spend, together (<-- this is to maintain the rhythm)
Thank you for showing purest love in a hopeless time
Touching your skin makes me fly high
Thank you for being the "Liebste"
I'll always be loving you...

Good luck, my friend.

 

[emsr2d2]

Note, lazi, that felt in love is not correct. You fell in love.

The phrase is "to fall in love", leading to "fell in love" and "has/have fallen in love".