Hi, I need your help to edit my formal email to an English language university...well, my native language is not English so I’m very anxious about it . I know it’ll have a very essential effect on my application …so it would be helpful if you could correct my mistakes…
Thanks


October 16, 2013

Dear Sir or Madam,
I am contacting you for the following reason. My name is Maryam Abbasi. I live in Iran, Tehran. My husband and I decided to continue our studies abroad. I am Iranian and 24 years old. I graduated with a bachelor's degree in Microbiology from ___ University. My husband, ___is Afghan and he is 23 years old. He is a senior at_____University in bachelor of Laws.
We are extremely interested to apply for M.A in your renowned university.
I would appreciate it if you would indicate the academic entry requirements and the qualification needed to apply in _____ University for international students. And I would like to inquire about the international students’ tuition fees and accommodation.

Thank you in advance for your attention to my request. I look forward to receiving your response.

Yours sincerely,