letter to a friend

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englishlerner3r3

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Hello everyone!
I've written a letter to my English friend, but now I am a bit confused about the right order of the sentences.
Could you please help me with correcting it? I don't want my friend to think that I'm rude and unpolite :)

Here it is:

Dear Jan
1) I hope you are all well, and that you’ve recovered from the busy Christmas period.
2) I’m writing to ask you a favor. I’m coming down to London at the end of the month to go to a conference. 3) It’s the 22nd – 24th January. 4) Could you put me up for a few days? 5) I don’t mind where you put me. 6) I’ll sleep anywhere!
7) There is something else I’d like to ask you. 8) Could I have a bite to eat when I arrive? 9) Just a sandwich will do. 10) I hope that’s all right.
11) Write soon and let me know.
Best wishes
Maria

Is it okay to start a letter like that? Or should have I started it with a direct request (like in sentence 2)? And do you think it's correct to use sentence 10 in the end?
Thanks for your help!
 

emsr2d2

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Hello everyone!
I've written a letter to my English friend, but now I am a bit confused about the right order of the sentences.
Could you please help me with correcting it? I don't want my friend to think that I'm rude and unpolite :)

Here it is:

Dear Jan
1) I hope you are all well, and that you’ve recovered from the busy Christmas period.
2) I’m writing to ask you a favor. I’m coming down to London at the end of the month to go to a conference. 3) It’s the 22nd – 24th January. 4) Could you put me up for a few days? 5) I don’t mind where you put me. 6) I’ll sleep anywhere!
7) There is something else I’d like to ask you. 8) Could I have a bite to eat when I arrive? 9) Just a sandwich will do. 10) I hope that’s all right.
11) Write soon and let me know.
Best wishes
Maria

Is it okay to start a letter like that? Or should have I started it with a direct request (like in sentence 2)? And do you think it's correct to use sentence 10 in the end?
Thanks for your help!

Welcome to the forum.

I hope you're not planning to put the numbers in the post as you have above. Your letter is very formal for a letter to a friend! Your friend must have been very busy at Christmas 2012 to have taken until October 2013 to recover from it.
 

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And I would drop sentences 7-10.
We expect to feed our guests.
 
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