"add your own comments as what I need to add more of and what i do not need in this analysis paper, Thanks.
Down below is my essay of what i have so far..."
Your introductory comments above are not bad, but have some little problems of their own:
1. "as what I need" This should be "as to what I need."
2. "what i do not need" This should be "what I do not need."
3. "what i have so far" This should be "what I have so far."
Little errors like this suggest that you are not checking your sentences carefully enough.
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