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    Post hi dear teacher please correct

    Dear John,
    I miss you a lot. I haven't seen you for two months. It's a long time and I want want to see you once again to talk to you about everything.
    I have heard that you have had a bad accident and now you are in the hospital. I heard that yesterday and I decided to write you a letter. Now I'm so hopeful to see you again and I hope you have a speedy recovery and I wish you be healthy again.
    Let me write short and I wish see you soon.
    your friend,
    E. Jahandideh



    thanks dear teacher

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    Quote Originally Posted by eqbalf View Post
    Dear John,
    I miss you a lot. I haven't seen you for two months. It's a long time and I want want to see you once again to talk to you about everything.
    I have heard that you have had a bad accident and now you are in the hospital. I heard that yesterday and I decided to write you a letter. Now I'm so hopeful to see you again and I hope you have a speedy recovery. ('and I wish you be healthy again' - it's repetition and wrong grammar).
    Let me write short (I am not sure about this phrase, let native speakers check it) and I hope ('wish' is very formal) to see you soon. (you could write 'I wish you a speedy recovery' not to repeat the word 'hope')
    your friend,
    E. Jahandideh



    thanks dear teacher
    This is my version.
    If I were a native speaker of English, I would never shut up.)

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    Default Re: hi dear teacher please correct

    Quote Originally Posted by eqbalf View Post
    Dear John,
    I miss you a lot. I haven't seen you for two months. It's a long time and I want want to see you once again to talk to you about everything.
    I have heard that you have had a bad accident and now you are in the hospital. I heard that yesterday and I decided to write you a letter. Now I'm so hopeful to see you again and I hope you have a speedy recovery and I wish you be healthy again.
    Let me write short and I wish see you soon.
    your friend,
    E. Jahandideh
    Thre are no serious problems for an informal letter.

    In British English we say 'in hospital', not 'in the hospital'

    I hope you have a speedy recovery (and are soon healthy again).


    Your last sentence is unnatural. You might consider something along the lines of: This has been just a short note to wish you all the best. I hope to see you soon.
    Please do not edit your question after it has received a response. Such editing can make the response hard for others to understand.


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    Default Re: hi dear teacher please correct

    I have heard that you have had a bad accident and now you are in the hospital.
    Correct me if I am wrong, but I assume the accident was over. So should I place (I have heard that you had a bad accident and now you are in the hospital) omitting have?

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    Default Re: hi dear teacher please correct

    No- the accident may have finished, but the injuries that resulted are still relevant, so the present perfect is fine.

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