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    check please the composition

    All animals living in the jungle have "law of the jungle". "Law of the jungle" is an expression the means "survival of the strongest". This law occurs in our society. If men are strong spirit and in body, when him will be winner in the life. All hard work and problems he will make to had best life. If men are weak, when him will have hard and no sense life. I think inveterate alcoholics, drug addicts have weak soul/spirit and this weak class of the men, who lived for new dose. This law was and will be always. And I think, what I will resist all difficulty in my life.

    PS: Please check grammar my composition. :)

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    Re: check please the composition

    Quote Originally Posted by BlowUp View Post
    All animals living in the jungle have a "Law of the jungle". The "Law of the jungle" is an expression that means "survival of the strongest". This law occurs in our society. If men are strong in spirit and in body, when they will be winners in the life. All the hard work and problems he will make to had best life they have will turn out for the best. If men are weak, then they will have a hard and no sense senseless life. I think inveterate alcoholics and drug addicts have weak souls and spirits, and this weak class of the men, who live only for newtheir next dose. This law washas been and will always be there. Believing this, I will resist all difficulty in my life.

    PS: Please check the grammar in my composition. :)
    I have tried to offer you some help as you asked, but without completely re-writing your composition. You have an interesting outlook on life.
    I'm not a teacher of English, but I have spoken it for (almost) all of my life....

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    Re: check please the composition

    BlowUp, when are you going to submit this essay to your teacher/tutor for marking?
    Remember - correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing make posts much easier to read.

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    Re: check please the composition

    I showed this essay for my teacher. Thank you for site :)

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    Re: check please the composition

    Quote Originally Posted by BlowUp View Post
    I showed this essay for my teacher. Thank you for site :)
    And what did your teacher say about your essay?
    Remember - correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing make posts much easier to read.

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