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    Default "These lion cubs, born in a Gaza zoo, have died just two days after birth."

    Hi teachers,

    "These lion cubs, born in a Gaza zoo, have died just two days after birth." Source: BBC news

    My version : These lion cubs, born in a Gaza zoo, have died after two days they were born.

    Is my version correct?

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    Default Re: "These lion cubs, born in a Gaza zoo, have died just two days after birth."

    Quote Originally Posted by kite View Post
    Hi teachers,

    "These lion cubs, born in a Gaza zoo, have died just two days after birth." Source: BBC news

    My version : These lion cubs, born in a Gaza zoo, have died after two days they were born.

    Is my version correct?
    No, it isn't.

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    Default Re: "These lion cubs, born in a Gaza zoo, have died just two days after birth."

    Isn't there any other way to rewrite the original version?

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    Default Re: "These lion cubs, born in a Gaza zoo, have died just two days after birth."

    Quote Originally Posted by kite View Post
    Isn't there any other way to rewrite the original version?
    Almost certainly, but why do you want to?

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    Default Re: "These lion cubs, born in a Gaza zoo, have died just two days after birth."

    I am sometimes confused about the use of "after". You would have seen how I had used "after" in my own sentence. So I want to know whether there is another way to rewrite the sentence with the word "after".

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    Default Re: "These lion cubs, born in a Gaza zoo, have died just two days after birth."

    Quote Originally Posted by kite View Post
    I am sometimes confused about the use of "after". You would have seen how I had used "after" in my own sentence. So I want to know whether there is another way to rewrite the sentence with the word "after".
    The original sentence already contains the word "after".
    Last edited by 5jj; 22-Nov-2013 at 20:34. Reason: minor typo

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    Default Re: "These lion cubs, born in a Gaza zoo, have died just two days after birth."

    You could say, "These lion cubs, born in a Gaza zoo, have died after, two days after they were born."
    Please do not edit your question after it has received a response. Such editing can make the response hard for others to understand.


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    Default Re: "These lion cubs, born in a Gaza zoo, have died just two days after birth."

    The original version does avoid repeating born, though.

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    Default Re: "These lion cubs, born in a Gaza zoo, have died just two days after birth."

    Quote Originally Posted by Tdol View Post
    The original version does avoid repeating born, though.
    "These lion cubs, born in a Gaza zoo, have died after, two days after birth."



    I still think the original is fine.
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