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    Editing my mission statement

    Hello. I'm new to the forums (please be gentle).

    I'm trying to complete my mission statement/about us for my blog and need some help. I'm stuck on this line. It looks right but something feels off:

    "WGI has deep roots in New York and New Jersey. We're storytellers obsessed with events, food, travel, street wear, art and the people that drive them."

    1)Is this sentence grammatically correct?

    2)Can I refer to events, food, travel, street wear and art as "them"

    Thanks in advance. I'm excited that I found this website (soooo useful)

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    #2

    Re: Editing my mission statement

    Yes & yes

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    Re: Editing my mission statement

    Doesn't sound right to me....
    "obsessed with old cars and the people who drive them" would be ok, but "driving" events, food, travel, streetwear and art????

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