Sakar Kumar
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- Jan 3, 2014
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- Hindi
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- India
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- India
Hi ,
I have phrased follwing pragraph for my technical writing , But i think i lack clarity and the sentence sound obscure , I have tried all calculation but couldnt come up with any better sentence . Can someone please have a look at the below para and see if it can be improved .Any helpf is appreciated :
"The situation we discussed is the condition of equilibrium, just before time capture a frame and see the condition. The region is poured by holes, the combination and recombination happen according to the old hole concentration, so essentially the region is in non equilibrium state.
Supposing measurement is started at time T, if the measurement is taken after some time the equilibrium is established and constant reading is observed but during a small interval the mercury constantly rises."
Regards ,
Sakar
I have phrased follwing pragraph for my technical writing , But i think i lack clarity and the sentence sound obscure , I have tried all calculation but couldnt come up with any better sentence . Can someone please have a look at the below para and see if it can be improved .Any helpf is appreciated :
"The situation we discussed is the condition of equilibrium, just before time capture a frame and see the condition. The region is poured by holes, the combination and recombination happen according to the old hole concentration, so essentially the region is in non equilibrium state.
Supposing measurement is started at time T, if the measurement is taken after some time the equilibrium is established and constant reading is observed but during a small interval the mercury constantly rises."
Regards ,
Sakar