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I am new here. I have not learned English academic or scholastic but am a self-educated person that have exercised in some forums. So I confess I am not an expert English and need some considerations and guides in this way. Also,I have many question and need an ongoing editing about my texts that I will ask. For starting, this is a comment I sent to a forum today and am curious to know what are my wrongs.

It happened for me a few years ago too. I had a 125cc Honda motorcycle. There is a vast dry salt lake near my city ( usually the most of it, is empty of water in the summer). It is very vast and flattened for driving and I loved to drive motorcycle in such smoothy ground. It was covered with 10cm salt and was very pleasant for a soft driving. Someday I went there and played for hours on the flat salts. Beside the lake was a natural channel for water passage. I decided to jump over the channel as moto Sport Riders!! But sorrily I fell into the channel instead of jumping over it The half of me and motorcycle sank into a deep and very sticky mud which was covered with a tiny layer of salt and I didn't notice that. I attempted very hard for a long time to release my legs from that sticky mud and eventually I could to get out from the mud as an iguana. Then I looked at the motor which the half of that was into the mud. Nobody was there or near to that place to help me to pull out the motor. So I began trolling the rear wheel low-low. Eventually after the half-hour I succeeded to take out my motorcycle from the mass of glue !!
 
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I am new here. I have not learned English academic​ally or [STRIKE]scholastic[/STRIKE] at school but am a self-educated person [STRIKE]that[/STRIKE] who [STRIKE]have[/STRIKE] has [STRIKE]exercised[/STRIKE] practised/done exercises in some forums. So I confess I am not an English expert [STRIKE]English[/STRIKE] and need some [STRIKE]considerations[/STRIKE] help and [STRIKE]guides[/STRIKE] guidance. [STRIKE]in this way.[/STRIKE] Also, I have many questions and need [STRIKE]an[/STRIKE] ongoing editing [STRIKE]about[/STRIKE] of my texts [STRIKE]that[/STRIKE] which I will [STRIKE]ask[/STRIKE] post here. [STRIKE]For starting[/STRIKE] To start with, this is a comment I sent to a forum today and am curious to know what [STRIKE]are[/STRIKE] my [STRIKE]wrongs[/STRIKE] errors are.

[STRIKE]It happened for me a few years ago too.[/STRIKE] This happened to me a few years ago.

I had a 125cc Honda motorcycle.

There is a [STRIKE]vast[/STRIKE] (you say it is vast at the beginning of the next paragraph so it doesn't need to be said here) dry salt lake near my city (usually [STRIKE]the most of it, is empty of water[/STRIKE] it is mostly empty in the summer).

It is [STRIKE]very[/STRIKE] vast and [STRIKE]flattened[/STRIKE] flat so it is perfect for driving. [STRIKE]and[/STRIKE]

I loved [STRIKE]to drive[/STRIKE] riding my motorcycle [STRIKE]in[/STRIKE] on such [STRIKE]smoothy[/STRIKE] smooth ground.

It [STRIKE]was[/STRIKE] is covered with 10cm salt and [STRIKE]was[/STRIKE] is very pleasant for a soft [STRIKE]driving[/STRIKE] drive/ride.

[STRIKE]Someday[/STRIKE] One day, I went there and played for hours on the flat salts.

Beside the lake was a natural water channel. [STRIKE]for water passage.[/STRIKE]

I decided to jump over the channel [STRIKE]as[/STRIKE] like [STRIKE]moto Sport[/STRIKE] MotoSport riders! [STRIKE] ! [/STRIKE]

[STRIKE]But sorrily[/STRIKE] Unfortunately I fell into the channel instead of jumping over it.

[STRIKE]The half of me and motorcycle[/STRIKE] I sank up to my waist/to the top of my thighs into a deep and very sticky mud which was covered with a [STRIKE]tiny[/STRIKE] thin layer of salt [STRIKE]and[/STRIKE] which I didn't notice. [STRIKE]that.[/STRIKE]

I [STRIKE]attempted[/STRIKE] tried very hard for a long time to release my legs from that sticky mud and eventually I [STRIKE]could to get out[/STRIKE] extricated myself from the mud [STRIKE]as[/STRIKE] like an iguana.

Then I looked at [STRIKE]the[/STRIKE] my motorcycle - [STRIKE]which the[/STRIKE] half of [STRIKE]that[/STRIKE] it was [STRIKE][STRIKE]into[/STRIKE][/STRIKE] in the mud.

Nobody was [STRIKE]there or near to that place[/STRIKE] around to help me [STRIKE]to[/STRIKE] pull out [STRIKE]the[/STRIKE] my motorcycle.

So I began trolling the rear wheel low-low. I don't know what this means. "Trolling" is not the right verb here. Do you mean that you started to spin the back wheel very slowly.

Eventually after [STRIKE]the[/STRIKE] [STRIKE]half-hour[/STRIKE] half an hour I [STRIKE]succeeded[/STRIKE] managed to [STRIKE]take out[/STRIKE] rescue my motorcycle from the mass of glue!


Welcome to the forum.

Please see my suggested amendments, corrections and comments above in red.
 

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Welcome to the forum.

Please see my suggested amendments, corrections and comments above in red.

Thank you very much. It was the best lesson to me. I realized my errors. Your editing was like a light in the darkness to me. Before you modify my text, I didn't know how many mistake was in my writing. I can simulate you as a mirror that I look at it and fix my defects.
So I began trolling the rear wheel low-low. I don't know what this means. "Trolling" is not the right verb here. Do you mean that you started to spin the back wheel very slowly.

yes I did mean... I appreciate you for correction :)
 
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